The author claims that of the two leading real estate firms in his town, Adams Realty is better than Fitch Realty, and thus suggest that you should use Adams Realty services if you want to sell your home quickly and at a good price. The author's conclusion is based on the premises that Adams has more real estate agents, that their revenue is double that of Fitch, and that Adams sold one of his properties last year in a period of time shorter than the one managed by Fitch when they sold his home ten year ago. There are many flaws in the evidence given by the author as he gave no substantial evidence to support his claims.
First of all, when the author said that one of the reasons why Adams is superior is because they have more real estate agents, he could be thinking that having more salesmen means more chance to sell a property. In assuming this he didn't take into account that the numbers could mislead him because these real estate agents may not be that comptent, and therefore they may provide you with a not that good deal. Also, even though small businesses tend to have a smaller work force, they usually tend to be family owned, and we all know that family owned businesses usually work with passion and may outperform a big firm if given the same ressources for a given task.
Second, in comparing their revenue, the author assumed that a bigger revenue means that Adams Realty is performing better. But he didn't into account the nature of properties that the two firms are selling. Adams may be selling houses that are located in the center of the city, and these properties tend to be very expensive as everyone wants to live there and the demand outweighs the offering. Not to forget that Adams has a larger work force, and that if we scale it to that of Fitch, they may actually have the same numbers or Fitch may even have better sales numbers, and thus be considered the better firm following the author's logic.
Finally, the authors suggests that homes sell faster with Adams based on his personal experience. Adams managed to sell his house in just one month last year, while Fitch took four months to sell home ten years ago. But he didn't take into account the fact that ten years ago, the world was living a crisis caused but the burst of the real estate bubble, and the demand for real estate was at an all time low. This means that even Adams would have struggled to sell his home back then, and that it could have taken them even more time than Fitch.
To conclude, the author made the conclusion that selling your home using Adams Realty services would be the best option as you will sell it quickly and at a good price. But he based his conclusion on premises and assumptions that were mainly based on number that don't reflect the reality and on his personal experience, making his analysis very subjective. His text would have been more convincing if it was based on objective arguments.
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not exactly
argument 3 -- OK
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 535 350
No. of Characters: 2352 1500
No. of Different Words: 220 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.809 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.396 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.063 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 26 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.863 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.824 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.362 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.584 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.206 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 238, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...r home quickly and at a good price. The authors conclusion is based on the premises tha...
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Line 1, column 423, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ld one of his properties last year in a period of time shorter than the one managed by Fitch w...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 233, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...to sell a property. In assuming this he didnt take into account that the numbers cou...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 256, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...assuming this he didnt take into account that the numbers could mislead him becau...
^^
Line 3, column 555, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...owned, and we all know that family owned businesses usually work with passion and...
^^
Line 5, column 131, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ams Realty is performing better. But he didnt into account the nature of properties t...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 627, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...onsidered the better firm following the authors logic. Finally, the authors suggests...
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Line 7, column 224, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...nths to sell home ten years ago. But he didnt take into account the fact that ten yea...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 264, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...s that were mainly based on number that dont reflect the reality and on his personal...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, if, may, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.6327345309 107% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 28.0 13.6137724551 206% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 68.0 28.8173652695 236% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 16.3942115768 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2406.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 531.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53107344633 5.12650576532 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.10673278573 2.78398813304 76% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.421845574388 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 745.2 705.55239521 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 12.0 1.67365269461 717% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 22.8473053892 136% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.8174419527 57.8364921388 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.529411765 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.2352941176 23.324526521 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88235294118 5.70786347227 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292457584349 0.218282227539 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103944026784 0.0743258471296 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0847262288344 0.0701772020484 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181278846486 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0991486869183 0.0628817314937 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 14.3799401198 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.93 48.3550499002 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.59 12.5979740519 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 98.500998004 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.0 12.3882235529 137% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 11.1389221557 129% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.