"Two years ago, our consultants predicted that West Egg's landfill, which is used for garbage
disposal, would be completely filled within five years. During the past two years, however, town
residents have been recycling twice as much aluminum and paper as they did in previous
years. Next month the amount of material recycled should further increase, since charges for
garbage pickup will double. Furthermore, over ninety percent of the respondents to a recent
survey said that they would do more recycling in the future. Because of our residents' strong
commitment to recycling, the available space in our landfill should last for considerably longer
than predicted."
The mayor of the town summarises a prediction made two years ago that Water Egg's landfill will be completely filled within 5 years. He also states that because of residents' strong commitments to recycling the
space available for garbage disposal would last much longer than it was predicted.
Mayor based his conclusion upon assumptions that from the past two years people are recycling twice the amount of aluminium and paper than they did in the previous years. In addition he posits that more material would
be recycled starting next month as price for garbage pickup will increase.
All these assumptions have inherent flaws which question the credibility of author's conclusion.
To begin with, author mentions only about the increased recycling rate of aluminuium and paper. There is no information about other materials such as plastics which are hard to recycle.
Also whether the recycling is being done by most of the households or just a few, is not given. If only few households are recycling waste then amount of garbae will still remain same or increase.
In addition there's no guarantee that increase in price will lead to people recycling more waste materials. There could be possibility that maximum amount of waste is already being recycled in which case the
increase in price of garbage collection would have no effect on the amount of waste being recycled.
Moreover, survey showing almost 90% of people being committed to recycling does not ensure that people will actually recycle more waste in the future. Even if people are committed they might not have efficient
means of recycling the waste after a certain limit is reached.
Also, there's no information on how many people were part of the survey. If only a smattering of people participated in the survey, the outcome of the survey would fail to provide a substantial ground for author's conclusion.
If all these flaws would have been addressed by the author then his argument would have been convincing. But in the absence of counter arguments and their logical rejection the argument is unconvincing as it stands.
To convince me author needs to specify if recycling only paper and aluminium would make a significant impact on the amount of
total recycled waste and whether increase in the price of garbage pickup will be conducive to people recycling more waste. Also author needs to provide the necessary statistical data about the survey and
support his argument that people will in fact recycle more waste in future.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 25 15
No. of Words: 414 350
No. of Characters: 2056 1500
No. of Different Words: 194 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.511 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.966 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.534 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 79 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 51 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.56 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.029 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.64 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.294 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.797 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.074 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 16 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 209, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ents strong commitments to recycling the space available for garbage disposal wou...
^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Space
... strong commitments to recycling the space available for garbage disposal would la...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 175, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
...than they did in the previous years. In addition he posits that more material would b...
^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ition he posits that more material would be recycled starting next month as price...
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Be
...n he posits that more material would be recycled starting next month as price f...
^^
Line 15, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... plastics which are hard to recycle. Also whether the recycling is being done by ...
^^^^
Line 19, column 4, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[2]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: addition,
... still remain same or increase. In addition theres no guarantee that increase in pr...
^^^^^^^^
Line 19, column 13, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...main same or increase. In addition theres no guarantee that increase in price wil...
^^^^^^
Line 19, column 207, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...already being recycled in which case the increase in price of garbage collection ...
^^^^
Line 21, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Increase
...ady being recycled in which case the increase in price of garbage collection would ha...
^^^^^^^^
Line 25, column 152, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[2]
Message: “Even if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ually recycle more waste in the future. Even if people are committed they might not hav...
^^^^^^^
Line 25, column 210, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... committed they might not have efficient means of recycling the waste after a cer...
^^^^
Line 27, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Means
...mitted they might not have efficient means of recycling the waste after a certain ...
^^^^^
Line 29, column 7, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: there's
...ter a certain limit is reached. Also, theres no information on how many people were ...
^^^^^^
Line 33, column 1, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ial ground for authors conclusion. If all these flaws would have been address...
^^
Line 35, column 127, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ke a significant impact on the amount of total recycled waste and whether increas...
^^^^
Line 37, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Total
... significant impact on the amount of total recycled waste and whether increase in ...
^^^^^
Line 37, column 124, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...nducive to people recycling more waste. Also author needs to provide the necessary s...
^^^^
Line 37, column 204, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ry statistical data about the survey and support his argument that people will in...
^^^^
Line 39, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Support
...tatistical data about the survey and support his argument that people will in fact r...
^^^^^^^
Line 39, column 66, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
... people will in fact recycle more waste in future.
^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, may, moreover, so, still, then, in addition, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2136.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 414.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15942028986 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57351478836 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 204.123752495 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 657.0 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2702644951 57.8364921388 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.421052632 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7894736842 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 16.0 5.15768463074 310% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.21173061998 0.218282227539 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0708427876496 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0726339144281 0.0701772020484 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0770887308685 0.128457276422 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.060618979385 0.0628817314937 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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