Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.Write a response in which you discuss the e

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Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.

Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

Leaders are essential to the success of any enterprise or government. For eg. Mukesh Ambani, has successfully lead Reliance, a telecom company, and dominated the market. The writer claims that for an enterprse to be successful new leadership should replace the existing one every five years. However, I mostly disagree with the author's argument because the new leadership might not always be more capable and effective.

It is necessary that there's a fair opportunity for everyone to be a leader and if the existing leaders are not performing up to the mark, they should be replaced by new ones. Five years time is sufficient for any leadership to show their potential and make a change for the society they live in. Since after five years it is possible that in some scenarios the present leadership has run out of ideas to successfully lead the enterprise, in that case, new leaders need to take up charge.

However in fields such as politics, businesses and education, it's after a long period of time that the true potential of leaders emerges. Consider a government which is working sedulously to make reforms to end poverty and corruption. In democratic countries like India, there are certain procedures which need to be followed before such reforms can be affected. It often takes time to make a change in these cases. Furthurmore, once the law has been enacted, it will take many more years before we start to notice its affect and finally see the situation ameliorating. Similarly, any change in the education system would also take quite a few years to show its affect. Therefore in these situations changing leadership in the middle of the revolutionary process can hinder the progress.

Moreover, it is highly possible that the current leadership is the most efficient one and there's no one more capable to uphold that responsibility. For example, Narendra Modi was re-elected as the Prime Minister of India after serving one five-year term. Although most poeple were not content with Modi's government, in the absence of any other comparable leadership, he was again chosen as the prime minister for another five years. Therefore, changing leadership is only beneficial when there's a more promising leadership in the picture.

To sum up, I'd like to say that author takes it too extreme by claiming that having new leaders would surely lead to success. In many scenarios, some of which discussed above, it's crucial that the government or business stick to the same leadership for success.

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Average: 1.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However,
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, moreover, similarly, so, therefore, as to, for example, such as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 28.8173652695 97% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 416.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06490384615 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77696569326 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53125 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 676.8 705.55239521 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.310999013 57.8364921388 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.35 119.503703932 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.1 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0457768699916 0.218282227539 21% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0150559279948 0.0743258471296 20% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0229468426115 0.0701772020484 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0309196654467 0.128457276422 24% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0236354492226 0.0628817314937 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.3799401198 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 98.500998004 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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