Two years ago, radio station WCQP in Rockville decided to increase the number of call-in advice programs that it broadcast; since that time, its share of the radio audience in the Rockville listening area has increased significantly. Given WCQP's recent success with call-in advice programming, and citing a nationwide survey indicating that many radio listeners are quite interested in such programs, the station manager of KICK in Medway recommends that KICK include more call-in advice programs in an attempt to gain a larger audience share in its listening area.
First, to assume KICK station will receive more responses by including call-in advice programs isn’t a valid argument, to strengthen this argument, we need to find holes in this argument.
First, just because of call-in advice programs, audience have increased, this assumption is totally vague. If station plays different selections for music like old-80s or latest pop songs, this might be the reason for increase audience as well. Does the station play a soap channels which could elicit more audience to tune in? Additionally, there might be the case where the audience tune in to listen call-in advice programs but eventually end up looking different programs which station offers. We do not know what the different channels and different entertainment facilities are provided by the station in this argument. Therefore, this argument can be strengthened if the author gives more details about different programs or segments offered by the station in conjunction with the call-in advice programs.
Second, how accurate is the survey that showed audience tend to listen call-in advice programs? What is the sample size? What were the questions asked in the survey? Were the questions specific to the call-in program segments or they include other segments as well? If the questions were asked in such a way such that audience inevitably chose call-in advice programs, then it supports a lack of claim to support this argument. To strengthen the argument, the author should mention details which would give answers to above questions.
Third, the success that have worked for KICK station might not work for Rockville station. For example, may be the audience of Medway station likes hot topics such as politics or economics over call-in advice programs. May be there are audiences which like to listen music of different genres. Demography do come in picture and matters a lot. If there are younger audiences, then they might listen to rock, pop music as compared to old people who likes to listen old melodies from the 80s or 90s. Thus, to strengthen this argument, we must know the preferences of audiences in Rockville station
In conclusion, Rockville station should not assume that they will generate same success which KICK station received if they incorporate call-in advice programs. We need to understand several factors in order to strengthen this argument like different programs/segments offered by KICK station, method and sample size of survey conducted, demography etc.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 400 350
No. of Characters: 2044 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.472 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.11 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.525 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 129 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 85 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.521 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.65 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.419 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 94, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...ses by including callin advice programs isnt a valid argument to strengthen this arg...
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Line 4, column 351, Rule ID: COMPARISONS_NNS_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'younger audiences than'?
Suggestion: younger audiences than
... picture and matters a lot If there are younger audiences then they might listen to rock pop music as ...
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Line 5, column 347, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... size of survey conducted demography etc
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, may, second, so, then, therefore, third, thus, well, for example, in addition, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 33.0 16.3942115768 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2044.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 398.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13567839196 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5584305797 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.434673366834 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 628.2 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 8.76447105788 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 398.0 22.8473053892 1742% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2044.0 119.503703932 1710% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 398.0 23.324526521 1706% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 123.0 5.70786347227 2155% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16361827241 0.218282227539 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.16361827241 0.0743258471296 220% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0993250657975 0.128457276422 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0402866806559 0.0628817314937 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 201.8 14.3799401198 1403% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -332.49 48.3550499002 -688% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 158.5 12.197005988 1299% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 14.01 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.31 8.32208582834 316% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 53.0 12.3882235529 428% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 161.2 11.1389221557 1447% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 159.0 11.9071856287 1335% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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