The council of Maple County, concerned about the county's becoming overdeveloped, is debating a proposed measure that would prevent the development of existing farmland in the county. But the council is also concerned that such a restriction, by limiting the supply of new housing, could lead to significant increases in the price of housing in the county. Proponents of the measure note that Chestnut County established a similar measure ten years ago, and its housing prices have increased only modestly since. However, opponents of the measure note that Pine County adopted restrictions on the development of new residential housing fifteen years ago, and its housing prices have since more than doubled. The council currently predicts that the proposed measure, if passed, will result in a significant increase in housing prices in Maple County.
The council’s prediction on passing its proposed measures is based on flawed and unwarranted assumptions for numerous reasons. The argument fails to develop a cogent case in developing a logical relation between its proposed measures and its likely outcome.
Expressing concerns about the Maple county getting overdeveloped, the council has proposed several measures. It is however unclear that what does the council signifies as over develop. Is it the gross development product? Or total industrial or trade growth. The author fails to describe the meaning of overdevelopment in this context. Hence there should be some statistical ways, some opinions of different economists which would have strengthen the argument.
The argument drastically fails to develop any logical relation between overdevelopment and curbing supply of houses and limiting supply of farmlands. It may be true that increase housing means increase in population, but how it can signify over development? The council can check over development by determining different parameters like trade growth, industrial growth, GDP growth, increasing tax rates or may be diminishing trade relations with different countries for stipulated period.
Moreover, the council extrapolated the results of its proposed measures based on measures implemented in nearby Pine and Chestnut counties, assuming the economy will remain unchanged over the period of ten years. It is highly prevalent the economic growths, housing development and land costs were different in different countries in the last ten years as compared to today’s Maple. There can be direct impact of climate and culture on the doubling of prices of houses in Pine country as compared to moderate increase in Chestnut county. Instead of entirely relying on past outcomes, the council should establish new method to predict future and take appropriate decisions by taking different opinions of different analysts and economists in consideration and study if similar measures were taken by any county which lead to reduction of prices of houses. Curbing housing developments can have indirect impact on its population which may result in migration of people from Maple County to any different region this effectively damaging Maple County in general.
Examining all the factors above if the council passes its proposed measures for curbing housing developments then it will a different outcome than expected, Thus a deeper study and scientific scrutiny is needed before passing any measures.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 4 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 382 350
No. of Characters: 2100 1500
No. of Different Words: 197 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.421 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.497 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.848 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 186 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 146 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 100 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.471 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.083 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.471 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.325 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.401 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 5, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'councils'' or 'council's'?
Suggestion: councils'; council's
The councils prediction on passing its proposed meas...
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Line 2, column 157, Rule ID: DOES_NP_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'signify'?
Suggestion: signify
...ever unclear that what does the council signifies as over develop Is it the gross develop...
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Line 2, column 430, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'strengthened'.
Suggestion: strengthened
...f different economists which would have strengthen the argument The argument drastically ...
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Line 2, column 441, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'the argument'.
Suggestion: the argument
... economists which would have strengthen the argument The argument drastically fails to develop any logica...
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Line 5, column 238, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ny is needed before passing any measures
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, thus, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 28.8173652695 56% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2108.0 2260.96107784 93% => OK
No of words: 382.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51832460733 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84387669549 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497382198953 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 705.55239521 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 4.96107784431 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 19.7664670659 5% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 382.0 22.8473053892 1672% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 57.8364921388 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 2108.0 119.503703932 1764% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 382.0 23.324526521 1638% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 66.0 5.70786347227 1156% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283189050001 0.218282227539 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.283189050001 0.0743258471296 381% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0701772020484 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.162005109923 0.128457276422 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0771272462834 0.0628817314937 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 195.6 14.3799401198 1360% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -333.17 48.3550499002 -689% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.1628742515 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 154.6 12.197005988 1268% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.22 12.5979740519 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 26.97 8.32208582834 324% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 106.0 98.500998004 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 58.0 12.3882235529 468% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 154.8 11.1389221557 1390% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 155.0 11.9071856287 1302% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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