The author stance that Ocean view has enjoyed a tremendous growth in revenue due to tourism, new businesses all attributed to a golf course built there, hence Hopewell should follow suit is a dangerous assumption, and should be treated with extreme caution, and the following a few pointers to the redefining scenario and how it should be addressed.
People differ in nature, character, and traits, hence may prefer different opinions or ideologies about various ways of life. The people residing in Ocean view may love tourism, and be a home to tourist attraction, however the residents of Hopewell may be technology-savy - carving niche in their love for technological activities, enthusiasm, and passion for innovations. These mindset may make them not receptive to tourists, which can result to Xenophobic attacks, slandering and other form of discrimination by the host. The article did not go into details the lifestyle, culture, and the pattern of way the indigenes of both cities are known for. This elaborate discussion is needed before jumping into the conclusion that building a Gulf Course would increase the economy of Hopewell. The writer's claim is invalid, and should be treated with levity.
Furthermore, the author failed to provide a distinct clarity on the population of both cities. If the population of ocean view is low, and tourism increases the revenue, definitely the economy would boom. However, we have no absolute idea on the population of Hopewell, their population may be higher than expected, and building a gulf course may be a burden, as the city may become over-populated, hereby reducing the amount generated in revenue, as the funds would go back to providing a basic amenities for the teeming populace. This is a case of China with a large population wanting to compete with Dubai on Tourism - This is a no! no!, and would hamper any growth in economy of Hopewell.
With more ado, the author failed to give more information about the economy of Hopewell and Ocean view when writing this article. A flippant surface statement that "Hopewell Economy would do well" is not sufficient enough. Hopewell economy may be fair based on their statistics, building a gulf course in order to generate revenue may affect the economy, as different races of people visit Hopewell - fraudsters, thieves, and assassins may come along also. This mixed multitudes may affect the businesses that are helping the Hopewell Economy to sustain the populace, hence causing a diminishing return in the economy. There is a proper need for further discourse on the state of the Hopewell Economy - its major source of revenue, the current economic trend, and areas that need to improve on rather than second guessing building a Gulf course center.
Hopewell Economy may not be at its best but would surely improve. Ocean view may have solved its own problem, by iterating on the building of a gulf course, and its subsequent return in terms of proceed. While it is necessary to still rely on the fact that tourist attraction may be a panacea to the fairly stable economy of Hopewell, there is a need for the author to come up with substantive claims, facts, and proofs that makes his argument valid. As of this writing the author's statement is detrimental to the survival of Hopewell Economy
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 9 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 547 350
No. of Characters: 2681 1500
No. of Different Words: 266 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.836 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.901 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.646 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 213 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 158 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 96 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 57 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 27.35 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.47 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.339 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.113 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 374, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this mindset' or 'These mindsets'?
Suggestion: This mindset; These mindsets
...nthusiasm, and passion for innovations. These mindset may make them not receptive to tourists...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 497, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'amenity'?
Suggestion: amenity
...unds would go back to providing a basic amenities for the teeming populace. This is a cas...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 638, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: No
...e with Dubai on Tourism - This is a no! no!, and would hamper any growth in econom...
^^
Line 7, column 462, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
..., thieves, and assassins may come along also. This mixed multitudes may affect the b...
^^^^
Line 7, column 656, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the economy. There is a proper need for further discourse on the state of the Ho...
^^
Line 9, column 452, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d proofs that makes his argument valid. As of this writing the authors statement i...
^^
Line 9, column 475, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... argument valid. As of this writing the authors statement is detrimental to the surviva...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, so, still, thus, well, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 28.0 12.9520958084 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2773.0 2260.96107784 123% => OK
No of words: 547.0 441.139720559 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06946983547 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83611736076 4.56307096286 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78380068961 2.78398813304 100% => OK
Unique words: 272.0 204.123752495 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497257769653 0.468620217663 106% => OK
syllable_count: 890.1 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 14.0 1.67365269461 836% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.4533038961 57.8364921388 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.65 119.503703932 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.35 23.324526521 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.25 5.70786347227 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.128343580522 0.218282227539 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0432022553153 0.0743258471296 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0614295445117 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0882327706174 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0398281284382 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 14.3799401198 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.3550499002 91% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 146.0 98.500998004 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 12.3882235529 149% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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