Tourism is very important in improving the revenue of a nation. It promotes the nation's economy and helps the nation to build a cordial relationship with other nations. Increasing the number of tourist spots in a nation would help in communicating the aesthetics of a nation to other countries thereby improving its revenue. But it is not necessary to improve the revenue from tourism alone.
The argument says that the tax revenue has increased by 30 percent. But it cannot be concluded that the tax revenue will always be on the rise. Tourism will generally attain its peak only during particular seasons. For example, people tend to spend their summer vacation in colder regions and vice versa. This means that for the rest of the year when there are no large number of tourists, the government has to take care of the maintenance costs of the tourist spots. This will also cause reduction in the sales of the businesses opened newly near the tourist spots. Hence, this increase in revenue cannot solely rely on the opening of tourist spots and new businesses.
The argument also says that building a golf course and a resort would increase the tax revenue. This statement should also consider the location in which the golf course and resort is going to be built. This is because some places are popular for their natural destinations like wildlife sanctuaries, waterfalls, parks etc. In those places the tourists will not be attracted towards artificial structures like resorts and golf courses. Determining the purpose of tourism in a particular place is very important before bringing up an idea of building a resort or a golf course. Also, it is important to understand that resorts and golf courses are not the only sources for improving the tax revenues. In some highly sophisticated places, where there are already high number of resorts, building a new resort would make no sense and will not contribute much towards the revenue.
Whenever a new idea is to be brought in the pros and cons of the idea has to be analyzed in order to be well informed. To conclude, it is necessary to have a clear picture that tells what are the existing tourist places, are those tourist places already giving a good enough revenue, what are the areas of improvement in case a tourist spot is not performing well in terms of attracting the tourists, etc.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 403 350
No. of Characters: 1913 1500
No. of Different Words: 190 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.48 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.747 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.53 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 140 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 106 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.211 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.606 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.526 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.304 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 81, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...he revenue of a nation. It promotes the nations economy and helps the nation to build a...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, so, well, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1955.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 403.0 441.139720559 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85111662531 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59849950806 2.78398813304 93% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 204.123752495 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476426799007 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 615.6 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1628348481 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.75 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.15 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 5.70786347227 44% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.151141834932 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0536467096067 0.0743258471296 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0419736736733 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0830213182398 0.128457276422 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0438714927027 0.0628817314937 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 14.3799401198 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.3550499002 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.197005988 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.85 12.5979740519 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 12.3882235529 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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