It is indeed true that the way in which a message is conveyed is more important than the message itself. Often we come across situations where we advice people or give inputs to someone to improve or enhance what they do. But it is not always going to result in a favorable outcome. It will result in a propitiate outcome only the message you have conveyed has reached the person correctly. Let us consider few examples to support this notion.
Consider, an example where a student is making a mistake in his/her exam. The teacher calls him and elucidates why it has been marked as a mistake and how to arrive at the correct answer. This is one way of conveying the message. In this case, the student will understand the teacher's motive of marking the mistake and the student will try to avoid committing the same mistake in the future. On the other hand, if the teacher had behaved in an extreme way, say, if the teacher had excoriated the student, the student would have got demotivated and discouraged and the student might might even create an aversion towards the subject. This shows how conveying a message plays a vital role.
Consider, another instance where a person has met with an accident and the public has admitted the person to the hospital. This news has to be conveyed to the person's family members. In this case it is very important to stay calm while conveying the message. Since, the message is not an expected one the conveyer of the message should not be too harsh on delivering it. Otherwise, it will create panic for the people who listen to the message. The conveyer should have a polite tone and convey the message with subtlety. This tells us how important is conveying a message rather than the message itself. The method with which the message is conveyed can change the overall mood of the actual message.
There are certain concessions as well with my stand. There can be circumstances where a message has to be passed really quickly. In such cases, there is no actual time to think how the message can be conveyed. But majority of our day-to-day situation requires proper communication or conveyance of the message.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: ADVICE_ADVISE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'advise' (verb) instead of advice (noun)?
Suggestion: advise
...ften we come across situations where we advice people or give inputs to someone to imp...
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Line 1, column 302, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... a favorable outcome. It will result in a propitiate outcome only the message you have conve...
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Line 3, column 439, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an extreme way" with adverb for "extreme"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... other hand, if the teacher had behaved in an extreme way, say, if the teacher had excoriated the...
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Line 3, column 577, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: might
...tivated and discouraged and the student might might even create an aversion towards the sub...
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Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...al. This news has to be conveyed to the persons family members. In this case it is very...
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Line 5, column 260, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Since” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... stay calm while conveying the message. Since, the message is not an expected one the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, really, so, well, while, as to, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1779.0 2235.4752809 80% => OK
No of words: 378.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.70634920635 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50025193994 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497354497354 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 566.1 704.065955056 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9878009109 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.347826087 118.986275619 65% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4347826087 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52173913043 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.298188441237 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0911625529805 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.146214802156 0.0758088955206 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18300995165 0.150359130593 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109989660542 0.0667264976115 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.74 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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