The Vice President for Human Resources at Climpton Industries wants to implement the monitoring of employees’ Internet usage from their work devices. His assertion is based on the evidence that monitoring an employees’ internet usage is the best way to ‘improve’ the time efficiency of the employee and ensure a better work ethic at Climpson. The Vice President feels that doing so would improve their overall profits. However, I strictly disagree with his assertion, primarily because it is reliant on the aforementioned unwarranted assumptions.
Firstly, is there any established correlation between an employees’ productivity & his internet usage for activities like shopping or playing games? Perhaps, what if playing games or scrolling through a shopping website helps them take a detox from their work stress and actually benefits the organization? It has been scientifically proven that perhaps, taking a stroll or reading an article or even playing a mini-game could actually help to ensure the mind’s balance thus bolstering its overall productivity. Also, imposition of principles that collect such data could also agitate the employees since they may find this unethical and may be harbored in their employee rights.
Secondly, the Vice president has asserted that by preventing employees from wasting time would effectively improve the work ethics of the organization and also increase their overall profits. It needs to be recognized whether there exists an established dependency between the employees time efficiency and the company’s overall profits. What if the organization has its revenue and profits completely independent of such data? What if the profits increase for one quarter and decrease for the next? It would be tough to rollback to the current state and change such guidelines every now & then.
Lastly, can the organization evade the attempts made by humans to safeguard ‘their’ rights? The prompt mentions that the company would offer an imposition on the employees’ work devices. What if the employee actually uses his/her personal device or internet connection to play games? You simply cannot impose a restriction on his/her activities in such a case. Perhaps what if it is the employees’ child who ends up playing a game instead of his/her parents? In such a scenario, the imposition of such guidelines would be anomalous to the expected outcome.
Some people however may say that time efficiency could be attributed as the primary factor to judge the overall productivity of a person. But, they simply end up ignoring the underlying assumption that the employees’ are humans and not machines that could be programmed to work in a synchronous manner. Thus, it is important to understand that as humans, we have our own limitations and we may find several ways to overcome them. Therefore, there needs to be more scientifically backed evidence that would support the existence of such a phenomenon where the employees’ internet activity would lead to better profitability for the organization.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 23 15
No. of Words: 479 350
No. of Characters: 2495 1500
No. of Different Words: 235 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.678 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.209 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.879 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 188 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 159 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 111 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.826 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.343 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.739 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.298 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.505 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.103 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 279, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a synchronous manner" with adverb for "synchronous"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...chines that could be programmed to work in a synchronous manner. Thus, it is important to understand th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2591.0 2260.96107784 115% => OK
No of words: 476.0 441.139720559 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.44327731092 5.12650576532 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.56307096286 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0542306657 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 242.0 204.123752495 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508403361345 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 794.7 705.55239521 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 4.96107784431 181% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 19.7664670659 116% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.7220556178 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.652173913 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6956521739 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.60869565217 5.70786347227 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 8.20758483034 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286726995478 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0840482886346 0.0743258471296 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0947316753354 0.0701772020484 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.170894943929 0.128457276422 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.105835764414 0.0628817314937 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.27 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.84 8.32208582834 106% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 98.500998004 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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