The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The given prompt suggest the memo that - if Climpson industries regulate usage of internet in its premises, they can generate greater profit margins. It is based on the assumption that implementing restrictions will lead to higher productivity levels and provide better work ethics. While analyzing the suggestions by Vice President of human resources, we need to keep in check that there are various aspects to this situation.
To begin with, what is stress level the staff of Climpson deals with everyday? In many new emerging and improvised work ethics, there is minimal concentration on working style rather more emphasis is on the output. It is observed that mundane and boring work cycle can lead to lesser innovation and quality output, even after ensuring a follow up of every checklist of staff rule. So, could the new suggestion have a reverse effect on Climpsons and result in lesser overall profits?
Second concerning point being- there was no data provided regarding the fact that at what degree are the people in Climpson using internet for recreational purposes. There could be a scenario, where there has been an observed misuse of the internet facilities provided by Climpson. In such a phase, the memorandum provided by the Vice President is applicable. As mentioned above, yes - recreation is important for better outcomes but there should be a maintained proportion between work done and recreation needed.
Next point is the attitude of those working in Climpson towards the new rule. Could they feel it is restricting ? There is no mention of the fact that a feedback from employees should be conducted before implementation. Maintaining the moral and trust level relationship between employers and employees is very important of any company. it could be a fact that the latest addition to Climpson employee rulebook could generate a wave of negative responses, and this rather than improving could definitely impede profit levels.
The entire argument was based on assumption and no solid reasoning was provided. While it is important to know both sides of a situation before summing up. No evidence relating recreational use of internet vs company's profit was provided. as stated above, recreation could be beneficial or hinderance based on the situation, which wasn't present in the given statements. so to sum it up, more information, statistics and analytics would be needed to take steps further in this direction.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 7 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 2006 1500
No. of Different Words: 219 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.091 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.785 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 151 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 93 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 56 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.889 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.377 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.444 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.287 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.535 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.039 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
... level the staff of Climpson deals with everyday? In many new emerging and improvised wo...
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Line 3, column 336, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...and quality output, even after ensuring a follow up of every checklist of staff rule. So...
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Line 7, column 338, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...oyees is very important of any company. it could be a fact that the latest additio...
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Line 9, column 82, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...on and no solid reasoning was provided. While it is important to know both sides of a...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 240, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: As
...ternet vs companys profit was provided. as stated above, recreation could be benef...
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Line 9, column 332, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...inderance based on the situation, which wasnt present in the given statements. so to ...
^^^^^
Line 9, column 371, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
... wasnt present in the given statements. so to sum it up, more information, statist...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, regarding, second, so, while, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 11.1786427146 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 55.5748502994 99% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2059.0 2260.96107784 91% => OK
No of words: 393.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23918575064 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86081912085 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567430025445 0.468620217663 121% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.613682559 57.8364921388 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.0476190476 119.503703932 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7142857143 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47619047619 5.70786347227 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.20758483034 122% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173075169611 0.218282227539 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.04698982922 0.0743258471296 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0423668168418 0.0701772020484 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0911370539874 0.128457276422 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499210039054 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.3550499002 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 98.500998004 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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