The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president."In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Int

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The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.

"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

The vice president argues that his company must install monitoring device on the computers of employees in order to prevent personal use of computers such as for shopping. It is based on the premises that it would increase their productivity, prevent them from wasting time and improve profits of the company. The argument seems true at first sight, however, on deeper analysis it becomes clear that certain relevant aspects have not been taken into account, leading to a number of unstated assumptions and logical flaws.

First such unstated assumption is that the cause of limiting or inhibiting their productivity is employees’ use of computers for personal use. However, there may be the case that not all employees are browsing internet for shopping and recreational activities. Instead, some of them may use internet to learn new software package which they can use in the work assigned to them or some of them may also use internet for finding a solution to work related problem. For example, the study conducted by behavioural scientists of an NGO in 2006 in India concluded that companies which are dependent on conducting its business online, employees of such companies use internet to learn computer packages. Therefore, in order to overcome this flaw, the vice president should examine the business structure of the company and the reason as to why employees are using internet.

Second unstated assumption is related to analogy between an employee using his own workstation for work and same workstation for personal use. However, it may likely that though employees use internet during office hours, but when they browse internet for shopping and other non-work related activities they use computers of colleagues in order to protect their identity. It is a human psychology that employees use unscrupulous methods in organizations in order to demean others. For example, the study conducted by Competition India in 2008 concluded that out of 200 companies studied for the use of internet by their employees, in 168 companies employees use computers of their colleagues for non-work related activities. Hence, the vice president must examine the use of computers for work and non-work activities by employees to make the argument more valid.

Finally, the vice president has assumed unstated presumption that profits are related to the time that employees spend on internet and by punishing them, the productivity and profits would rise. However, the claim may not be true since profits are not only depend on the time of employees but also on other factors such as costs of production, the price of the products or services, overheads costs and borrowing costs of the company. And moreover, punishing the employees may have undesirable results since it would create the environment of fear and dominance. For example, the study conducted by Naukri, Human Resources company in India, in 2015 studied 500 large companies which followed stringent rules for employees had concluded that employee turnover ratio is highest in these companies and therefore, these companies incurred huge costs for hiring and training of employees frequently which impacted their profits. Thus, in order to render the argument acceptable, the vice president must examine the correlation between profits and internet use of employees and the likely effect of such punishable steps.

While concluding, after close examination of the argument presented, it is apparent that the argument as it stands now is considerably flawed due to its reliance on certain unwarranted assumptions. The recommendations in the above paragraphs show how it may be strengthened and made more logically sound in order to evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation.

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Average: 3.5 (3 votes)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, hence, however, may, moreover, second, so, then, therefore, thus, while, as for, as to, for example, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 11.1786427146 197% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 28.8173652695 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 55.5748502994 148% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 16.3942115768 116% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3180.0 2260.96107784 141% => OK
No of words: 594.0 441.139720559 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35353535354 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93681225224 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88167939138 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 255.0 204.123752495 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.429292929293 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 990.0 705.55239521 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 13.0 8.76447105788 148% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.8720273948 57.8364921388 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.0 119.503703932 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.7 23.324526521 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.75 5.70786347227 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149711731854 0.218282227539 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0598733290066 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405324390544 0.0701772020484 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0904520820372 0.128457276422 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461358204762 0.0628817314937 73% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 14.3799401198 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.34 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.72 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 137.0 98.500998004 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits.

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 594 350
No. of Characters: 3098 1500
No. of Different Words: 251 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.937 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.215 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.787 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 230 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 206 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 152 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 95 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.7 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.883 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.9 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.354 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.553 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.124 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5