The vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries sent the following recommendation to the company's president.
"In an effort to improve our employees' productivity, we should implement electronic monitoring of employees' Internet use from their workstations. Employees who use the Internet from their workstations need to be identified and punished if we are to reduce the number of work hours spent on personal or recreational activities, such as shopping or playing games. By installing software to detect employees' Internet use on company computers, we can prevent employees from wasting time, foster a better work ethic at Climpson, and improve our overall profits."
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
In the argument, the vice president of human resources at Climpson Industries recommends a policy that monitors the amount of internet used by Clipson’s employees because it would reduce the amount of time that workers waste that could be used for other things. He also recommends that censuring the workers who use lot of internet for personal or recreational activities would result in better work ethics. While these claims may be true, his conclusions rest on the following three unwarranted assumptions that severely diminish its validity.
Firstly, the author assumes that the use of internet is detrimental to work. Perhaps the use of internet may serve as an aid to work. It is possible that people who work too much may want to use some time to rest off. A continuous amount of work time without rest (which includes using the internet), might hinder, instead of help workers to be more effective. In addition, these workers might work more effectively when they are relaxed than when they are not and perhaps the use of internet keeps them in a calm state. If these scenarios are true, then the author’s claim holds no water.
Secondly, the author assumes the games played by these employees require the use of internet. Perhaps these games do not require internet, so installing a software that monitors the internet usage might not be redundant. In addition, the websites used for shopping by these workers may not be discernible by the software that the author recommends to be installed. If these cases are true, then the author’s argument is severely weakened.
Thirdly, the author assumes that the software would preclude the employees from wasting time therefore resulting in better work ethics, but this may not be true. It is possible that when these employees stop using the internet, they might find other ways to entertain themselves which may include talking so much and disregarding customers. Furthermore, these workers may be more irritable to customers because they are not using the internet. If these cases prove true, then the author’s claim that the software would result in better work ethics is significantly diminished.
In conclusion, the author may be correct in recommending that punishing people who violate the policy of using a lot of internet would cause good work ethics from the employees. However, as it stands now, the author’s argument rest on three assumptions that weaken its validity. To bolster the credibility of his argument, he must address the three assumptions above.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 415 350
No. of Characters: 2062 1500
No. of Different Words: 175 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.513 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.969 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.582 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 117 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.75 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.654 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.85 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.368 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.469 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.151 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s that severely diminish its validity. Firstly, the author assumes that the use...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...hen the author’s claim holds no water. Secondly, the author assumes the games p...
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Line 3, column 341, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommends being'.
Suggestion: recommends being
...ernible by the software that the author recommends to be installed. If these cases are true, the...
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Line 4, column 329, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...include talking so much and disregarding customers. Furthermore, these workers ma...
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Line 5, column 112, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun internet seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of (internet)'.
Suggestion: a lot of (internet)
... people who violate the policy of using a lot of internet would cause good work ethics from the e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, third, thirdly, while, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.9520958084 147% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 11.1786427146 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 22.0 13.6137724551 162% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 28.8173652695 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 16.3942115768 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 415.0 441.139720559 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11325301205 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70461506729 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428915662651 0.468620217663 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0451870638 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.1 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.75 23.324526521 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85 5.70786347227 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.16667510207 0.218282227539 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0602076149607 0.0743258471296 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0670783341321 0.0701772020484 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109605620974 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0645059841072 0.0628817314937 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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