When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity:

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When Stanley Park first opened, it was the largest, most heavily used public park in town. It is still the largest park, but it is no longer heavily used. Video cameras mounted in the park's parking lots last month revealed the park's drop in popularity: the recordings showed an average of only 50 cars per day. In contrast, tiny Carlton Park in the heart of the business district is visited by more than 150 people on a typical weekday. An obvious difference is that Carlton Park, unlike Stanley Park, provides ample seating. Thus, if Stanley Park is ever to be as popular with our citizens as Carlton Park, the town will obviously need to provide more benches, thereby converting some of the unused open areas into spaces suitable for socializing.

Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.

According to the letter Stanley Park decided to place more benches in the park in order to convert some of useless areas into socializing spaces. However, the decision lead me to question the efficiency because of weak assumptions. The author’s presumptions are not compelling in a few reasons.

First, the author postulates that video cameras which are mounted in the park’s parking lots decrease the popularity of the park, in last month. It is grounless that video cameras affect the popularity, it is plausible that the cameras might diminish the popularity, but the decreased number might be insignificant that the amount of declined number was in common variation range. Even the number of cars decreased it does not mead the decrease of the popularity in the park, people might visited the park on their foot. Moreover, if the last month’s popularity decreased also. It might be aberration caused by other factors like bad weather condition or ill economy condition in the town, so it is better for the Stanley Park to look in a long run.

In addition, the daily population of Carlton Park, 150 people per weekday, is not common number that soar only in a typical weekday. It is possible that there is severe vacillation that make significant gap between weekdays. Even the popularity is regularly high, people visit the Park not because of plenty of benches but because of the other facilities such as toilet, hotdog cart and so on. It is not necessary for Stanley Park to place extra benches in the park. Maybe it is more better for the park to replace the dead area into sports section which help the citizens to enjoy sports, pet walk and extra activities.

In summary, the author’s assumptions are so weak on many grounds that I could not have a reservation on it. As I mentioned above the author should contemplate more about the rudimental reasons of the problem and solutions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 584, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
... last month's popularity decreased also. It might be aberration caused by other...
^^^^
Line 5, column 481, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... extra benches in the park. Maybe it is more better for the park to replace the dead area i...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, as to, in addition, in summary, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 55.5748502994 77% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1598.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 323.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94736842105 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75995035449 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 204.123752495 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 503.1 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.7244889407 57.8364921388 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.533333333 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 23.324526521 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389104386164 0.218282227539 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132128342223 0.0743258471296 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140956946186 0.0701772020484 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203043445798 0.128457276422 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.120685843864 0.0628817314937 192% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.3799401198 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.3550499002 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 12.5979740519 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 323 350
No. of Characters: 1536 1500
No. of Different Words: 166 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.239 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.755 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.587 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 84 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 49 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 36 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.533 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.334 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.533 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.559 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.079 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5