The general welfare of a nation's people is a better indication of that nation's greatness than are the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Some people in the world may be disagree with the statement that the social welfare of a nation’s people represent the nation’s greatness better than the achievements of its artists, scientists and rulers. Their perspective is convincing in some circumstances, however, I have perspective more closer to the author’s claim.
Firstly, it is granted, the figures achievement indicate thier nation’s greateness in some cases. Andy Warhol could be a great example of an individual whose achievement improve the nation’s status. Andy was an outstanding artist in the United States, due to his significant effort, people nowaday know more about pop art and relize that modern art deserves recognition and his masterpieces are highly acclaimed until now. Thus, I agree that achievement of an individual could represent the nation’s power in a specific field such as art.
Secondly, although a great single person can represent their nation’s greatness, I believe that a social welfare is better to show their nation’s greatness. This is because the general welfare is the result of the long-term policy in nation which is different from the one’s achievement that last shorter. Thus, the welfare system reveal their nation’s greateness more better. For example, North Korea is one of the best exampler of my position. North Korea is well known for their poor people and adverse condition. Nothing represent the country better than their abysmal policy and people’s right which is neglected.
Finally, Sweden’s welfare system could be a good paradigm that indicate the nation’s greateness. Sweden is one of the moneyed nation in the world and a country with the most highly developed welfare, as well. The government of Sweden spend their social spending to GDP(Gross Domestic Product). This results in the country to have some of the lowest level of relative and absolute poverty. It is thier great welfare policy that represent their nation’s high position in the world.
In summary, I partly argree with the statement that a single person’s succeed represent their nation’s greatness, however, as I mentioned above I believe that general welfare indicate the nation’s high status more better,
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 300, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'closer' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: closer
...cumstances, however, I have perspective more closer to the author's claim. Firstly,...
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Line 3, column 29, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'figures'' or 'figure's'?
Suggestion: figures'; figure's
...s claim. Firstly, it is granted, the figures achievement indicate thier nation'...
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Line 5, column 385, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
...m reveal their nation's greateness more better. For example, North Korea is one of the...
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Line 5, column 546, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'represents'.
Suggestion: represents
...r people and adverse condition. Nothing represent the country better than their abysmal p...
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Line 9, column 225, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'better' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: better
... indicate the nation's high status more better,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, thus, well, for example, in summary, such as, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 33.0505617978 97% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1935.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 348.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56034482759 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31911543099 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10770647631 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 215.323595506 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488505747126 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 51.0201182783 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.5 118.986275619 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3333333333 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.88888888889 5.21951772744 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.418317257125 0.243740707755 172% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.150717761954 0.0831039109588 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116803106015 0.0758088955206 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.266253322595 0.150359130593 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070633554558 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.