People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling re

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People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

People behave based on their decision and consciousness, however some people’s behavior is largely determined by forces of other’s. Therefore I partially agree with the statement that people’s behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.

When people are young, especially when they are juvenile, parents, teachers trying to lead them wisely by control juveniles’ behavior and restrict their actions. This is because they are very susceptible that without any constrain they are easily opened to detrimental things which can affect them malevolently, such as violence, crime and salacious contents. In this period, adolesence, people’s behavior is forced by their metor, teachers and parents.

Moreover, even adults could not make decision based on their own consciousness when they are employed by a coperation. It is obvious that people who work for others should follow guidlines of thier company in order to earn money and retain their jobs. It is essential for them to behave in a boundary that their boss ordered, they have to move on action after their boss or manager confirm their conclusion which is determined by their own thinking. Thus, not only juveniles but also adults have to behave as other ordered.

On the otherhand, people who work for themselves, particularly artists, are more free. They behave as they want, completely. It is seminal for artists to follow their inherent and their mind to express what they feel and what they want to show the public. Thus, artists’ behavior is not forced by others.

In summary, I partially agree with the author’s statement when it comes to adolesence and adults who work for others.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 144, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, moreover, so, therefore, thus, in summary, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 58.6224719101 55% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1441.0 2235.4752809 64% => OK
No of words: 270.0 442.535393258 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33703703704 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.55969084622 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91494658274 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 215.323595506 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52962962963 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 437.4 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.302521199 60.3974514979 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.928571429 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225934404126 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0944891850606 0.0831039109588 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0930781515503 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.142220691849 0.150359130593 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.097666938978 0.0667264976115 146% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 100.480337079 72% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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