People's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
I agree with the statement that people's behavior is largely determined by forces not of their own making. Although the free will is the primrary influence of ones behavior, as far as I'm concern, family, social environment and culture has great impact on not only our behavior, but also our thought and decision making process. Subjectively, the people's behavior is mostly determined by forces not of their own making.
From ancient times people have learned about the benifit of live in a group. It is a very smart strategy for self-protection against the harsh environment, and fearceful preditators in the wilderness. With the development of our society, social groups, such as communities, schools or groups of friends have become more important to people. It is common for ones trying to adapt to a certain group by mimicing or following others behaviors, or the group leaders trying to keep everyone fall in line by stress the commonality within the group. In a way, the social groups we belongs to will have great influences on how we behave.
Other than social groups, the family has a very significant influence to ones behavior. All the attributes of parents will reflects on their early education. The extreme example will be the child abuse. If the parents are lacks of temper and always blames everything during the childhood of one person, it is possible that they are more likely to become lacks of sence of security or even pychological trama. Their behavior will be very different from the people who was raised from a more calmly childhood.
What is more, the culture has a great impact of our behavior as well. Although it is simiar to the infulence we recieve from social groups, the influence of culture present itself as a larger trends of how people behave from the same area. There are many reason why the culture has such great influence on us, it is possible the geological environment has a great impact, or it is possible that it is formed due to the history of this area.
Generally speaking, although our own free will determined our behavior, but it is also greatly influenced by our family, our peers and our culture.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 159, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... free will is the primrary influence of ones behavior, as far as Im concern, family,...
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Line 1, column 184, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'm
...y influence of ones behavior, as far as Im concern, family, social environment and...
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Line 1, column 346, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...ision making process. Subjectively, the peoples behavior is mostly determined by forces...
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Line 5, column 359, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...e important to people. It is common for ones trying to adapt to a certain group by m...
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Line 5, column 575, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'we' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'belong'
Suggestion: belong
...e group. In a way, the social groups we belongs to will have great influences on how we...
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Line 9, column 74, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ily has a very significant influence to ones behavior. All the attributes of parents...
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Line 9, column 124, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'reflect'
Suggestion: reflect
...ior. All the attributes of parents will reflects on their early education. The extreme e...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, well, such as, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.9520958084 46% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 13.6137724551 29% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 28.8173652695 111% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 55.5748502994 86% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1801.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 368.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.89402173913 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66836065224 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489130434783 0.468620217663 104% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 705.55239521 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.8473053892 92% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.2317850083 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.941176471 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6470588235 23.324526521 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.70588235294 5.70786347227 47% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.25449101796 133% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131283316865 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0610275862125 0.0743258471296 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104753152428 0.0701772020484 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.082028527029 0.128457276422 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.085507890162 0.0628817314937 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 14.3799401198 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.3550499002 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.1389221557 93% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.