Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author states that because the Brim River is deep and broad and no Palean boats have been found thus the "Palean basket" were not uniquely Palean. Although it is possible that the Palean basket is not unique to the Palean people, the author did not provide sufficient evidence to support his argument.
The author claim that because the Brim river is very deep and broad, therefore the only way for people to travel between Palean and Lithos is via boat. However, there are more possible alternitive solution which the author did not investigate. For example, it is possible that Palean people built a bridge in the more narrow section of the brim river, or there was a detour exist which allows Palean people travel without crossing the river. In order to support his argument, the author need to investigate along the river to see if such bridge vestiage exist. What is more, it is common for river to divert over time. Although the Brim River is deep, broad and impossible to across without boat, it is possible that it is so shallow that people can just walk across the water or the river were not run between Palean and Lithos. The author need to provide evidence from geological research to support his argument.
Even if the author would able to confirm that the Palean and Lithos people need to use boat to cross the Brim River. It is impossible to determine whether the boat is available to the people of Palean and Lithos with a simple claim as "no Palean boats have been found." Woods, the common materials for making boats, will tend to decay over time and only leaves little trace. It is more than likly that the research team has overlooked the vestiage of boat and made such hasty conclusion. What is more, it is possible that all the boats are in teh vicinity of Lithos instead of Palea. More evidence is required on how far had the archaeologist searched in the vicinity of Palea and Lithos to determine if the boat is truly exist in this area.
Finally, the author needs to provides evidence to rule out if there is third party involved in the trading between the Palea and Lithos. Since even though it is possible that Palea and Lithos cannot trade directly becasue they cannot cross the Brim River, there might be traveler or vendors who will travel between the village or both Palea and Lithos have trade relation with a remote ancient village. If this case can be supported by the new evidence, it is reasonable to challege the argument the author proposed.
In summary, in order to support his argument, the author need to provide evidence to suggest that it is impossible for people to travel between two villages without the boat and the boat does not exist during the time in both Palean and Lithos. What is more, the evidence to suggest the trading via a third party is not possible is important to proven that the argument is supported.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 509 350
No. of Characters: 2314 1500
No. of Different Words: 187 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.75 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.546 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.17 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 165 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 96 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 61 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 20 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.45 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.233 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.7 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.386 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.563 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 61, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ould able to confirm that the Palean and Lithos people need to use boat to cross ...
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Line 9, column 734, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'existed'.
Suggestion: existed
...ithos to determine if the boat is truly exist in this area. Finally, the author ...
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Line 13, column 30, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'provide'.
Suggestion: provide
...area. Finally, the author needs to provides evidence to rule out if there is third ...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, look, so, therefore, third, thus, for example, in summary, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 55.5748502994 112% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2400.0 2260.96107784 106% => OK
No of words: 509.0 441.139720559 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71512770138 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74984508646 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30609000506 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.396856581532 0.468620217663 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 705.55239521 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.096615574 57.8364921388 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.315789474 119.503703932 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7894736842 23.324526521 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.89473684211 5.70786347227 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.139995814393 0.218282227539 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0478205116867 0.0743258471296 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523975740538 0.0701772020484 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.093106413018 0.128457276422 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612963987609 0.0628817314937 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.3799401198 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 48.3550499002 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.32208582834 90% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 98.500998004 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4 Out of 6
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