The general welfare of a nation's people is a better indication of that nation's greatness than are the achievements of its rulers, artists, or scientists.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Some people think that the greate achievement of figures, live in the same country with them, is a better indication of the nation’s greateness than the general walfare. Despite of their assertion, I fully agree with the author’s argument in many grounds.
First, the general welfare is the result of the long-term admistrative policy, otherwise, the achievement of figures are ephemeral that might effect nation shorter than the welfare. The evanescent effect is nothing but flash light which can shine for short-time. North Korea is a great exampler of the adverse general welfare condition. North Korea has a great achievement , nuclear bomb, which give no beneficial effect to country except when it comes to diplomacy. The country is well known of their poor people of nation and abysmal welfare policy. Thus, the welfare of North Korea indicate their nation’s greatness more clearly than their nuclear bomb which is a great achievement.
Second, the general welfare is more fundamental standard than achievement of individual when world assess the nation’s greatness. This is because, without beneficial welfare system their will be less population in a nation and their will be more less chance to the single person. the general welfare could fund their country with various filed of study, it means that the country with great welfare could support their people more than the country with bad welfare policy. It is plausible that some achievements in the world could not see the light if their was no fund from their nations. Moreover, if the achievement which help the nation to stand out in specific field, thanks to the nation’s support, the wolrd would recognize the greateness of the nation by their general welfare, even if the individual make the achievement. The general welfare will represent their nation’s greatness by supporting their people to succeed.
Finally, the greatness of nation could be defined as how happy thier people are, not how the achieved. In the case of South Korea, the past president Kim Dae Jung can be a evidence that the nation’s happiness could be considered as their great welfare system not someone’s acheivement. In 2000, Dae Jung won the Nobel Peace Prize for his affort to fight for the reconcilitory between South and North Korea.
In summary, I agree with the claim that social welfare represent the nation’s greatness better than the figures achievement when I consider of the things I mentioned above.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 143, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[6]
Message: Did you mean 'affect'?
Suggestion: affect
...ent of figures are ephemeral that might effect nation shorter than the welfare. The ev...
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Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ion. North Korea has a great achievement , nuclear bomb, which give no beneficial ...
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Line 5, column 247, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'less' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: less
...opulation in a nation and their will be more less chance to the single person. the genera...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... more less chance to the single person. the general welfare could fund their countr...
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Line 7, column 171, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... the past president Kim Dae Jung can be a evidence that the nation's happine...
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Line 9, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...itory between South and North Korea. In summary, I agree with the claim that so...
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Line 9, column 110, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'figures'' or 'figure's'?
Suggestion: figures'; figure's
...nation's greatness better than the figures achievement when I consider of the thin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, if, moreover, second, so, thus, well, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 58.6224719101 78% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2111.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 401.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26433915212 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81565778534 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453865336658 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 631.8 704.065955056 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 11.0 4.99550561798 220% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.1288118636 60.3974514979 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 117.277777778 118.986275619 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2777777778 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373319671698 0.243740707755 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147128576224 0.0831039109588 177% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0925403004448 0.0758088955206 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.256180212058 0.150359130593 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684713541188 0.0667264976115 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.