Workers in the small town of Leeville take fewer sick days than workers in the large city of Masonton, 50 miles away. Moreover, relative to population size, the diagnosis of stress-related illness is proportionally much lower in Leeville than in Masonton. According to the Leeville Chamber of Commerce, these facts can be attributed to the health benefits of the relatively relaxed pace of life in Leeville.
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
In this passage, we are informed that Leeville has better health status than Masonton with larger size. Referring to both sick leave status and illness diagnosis statistic, the author ascribes both of two phenomena to the health benefits out of the realtively relaxed pace of life in Leeville. Quite reasonable though such explanation appears at first glance, we can not safely claim that it is the unique one that accounts for the facts presented in the argument. Therefore, we should consider the following explanations, which could rival with the one proposed in the passage.
To start off, the author attributes fewer sick leave to Leeville's superior health status. While people might apply for fewer sick leave as their robust health status, the latter could have sprung from other reasons as well. First of all, it is likely that their companies don't allow them to apply more sick leave or only reserve very limited days for their sick leave in a year. If this is the case, fewer sick leave have little bearing on people's overall health status in Leeville. Consequently, it could be explained as stemming from more strict company's regulation for sick leave or less sick leave allowances. Second, while fewer sick leave might be caused by health status, the health status could not be exclusively attributable to fewer sick leave in practice. Instead, it is of equal likelihood that people in Leeville are enthusiastic for their work and therefore they don't like to apply for leave even with malaise. Once the assertion that people's crazy work attitude proves warranted, the author's underlying logic will be weakened, namely: fewer sick leave in Leeville reflects the fact that people in Leeville have better health status than Masonton.
Furthermore, the less stress-related illness could lend great support to the author's explanation that people in Leeville has been psychological status. However, such outgrowth could be considered not only from better sanity of villagers in Leeville, but also presumably from other explanations as well. One possible reason is that Leeville has much less population than Masonton. Moreover, an alternative account might be that majority of Leevilles have other illness, such as chronic disease, rather than stress-related illness. Without additional investigation, we can not decide which explanation could finally lead to the result of less stress-related illness. It is even likely that all of these aforementioned reasons have conspired to such phenomenon.
Last but not least, while we can admit for a moment that people in Leeville has better corporeal and ethereal status, it is reckless to claim that it is totally determined by the relax pace of life in Leeville. Other explanations could readily compete with the one alleged in the argument. For example, an agreeable environment of town or city could determine how people feel living in there and contributed to their health status. In addition, if government there actually practice a stringent social regulation for residents there, such strict policy might impact residents' mental status, which lead to the worse result of their health report. If any of these reasons could be demonstrated sufficiently, the author's reason about relaxed pace of life in Leeville will be weakened. Otherwise, we can trust the author's reasoning about the cause of these facts.
To draw a conclusion, while pace of life have exerted great influence on people's health status and their illness and work status, in the absence of sufficient information, we can not establish a casual relationship between it and the facts mentioned above. The distinction between Leeville and Masonton in statistics about sick leave and illness diagnosis is such a case for which we should consider more explanations that could account for the facts presented in the argument.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 618 350
No. of Characters: 3172 1500
No. of Different Words: 258 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.986 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.133 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.668 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 233 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 162 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 124 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 75 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 23.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.336 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.654 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.346 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.524 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.176 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 273, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
... all, it is likely that their companies dont allow them to apply more sick leave or ...
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Line 5, column 879, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...astic for their work and therefore they dont like to apply for leave even with malai...
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Line 9, column 78, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...illness could lend great support to the authors explanation that people in Leeville has...
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Line 9, column 294, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... also presumably from other explanations as well. One possible reason is that Lee...
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Line 13, column 176, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... claim that it is totally determined by the relax pace of life in Leeville. Other explana...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, in addition, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 12.9520958084 185% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 11.1786427146 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 74.0 55.5748502994 133% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 16.3942115768 110% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3247.0 2260.96107784 144% => OK
No of words: 616.0 441.139720559 140% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2711038961 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98190197535 4.56307096286 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73914728989 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 204.123752495 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.423701298701 0.468620217663 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 997.2 705.55239521 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1510773266 57.8364921388 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.884615385 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6923076923 23.324526521 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76923076923 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 12.0 6.88822355289 174% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174944748975 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639706204479 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0695183515667 0.0701772020484 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109804452026 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0534010090387 0.0628817314937 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 14.3799401198 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.3550499002 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 98.500998004 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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