‘Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.’
Author's argument that so-called Palean baskets about he specific woven baskets might be true but this argument is rife with holes and assumptions which does not allow author to make a valid case in this context.
Primarily, I would like to argue author's point that Brim river is very deep and broad. This river might be shallow in ancient time, but due to some geographical changes it became deep and broad as it is today. If river was not deep and broad in ancient time, people living in Palea village would had easily crossed the river and imitated the woven baskets in Lithos village also. Or it may be the case that in ancient times, there were no two different villages (Palean and Lithos). It was a single village and due to geographical changes, they got divided into two parts.
Secondarily, author fails to cite that no boats existed in Palean village. He/ she said that no Palean boats have been found. It may have been the case that Palean boats existed but due to any natural disaster like flood in Brim river, an earthquake may have destroyed the village and its properties. So, the archaeologists are not able to discover any boats. Author's assumption that since no boats have been found, none really existed is fallacious. There are many ancestral assests of any dynasty which have not been found by the archaeologists but have been believed to be existed.
Moreover, I would like to say that, author has not mentioned about the design and pattern of Palean boats. This might be the case that archaeologists have found some boats. Since, they are not aware of the design of Palean boats, they may have attributed these boats to any other village. Also, author fails to conclude that, basket pattern could be brought to the Lithos village only through the Palean boat and not by Lithos boat. May be, people of lithos had developed boats, using which they used to visit Palean village for buying or copying woven baskets.
Last but not the least, I would to throw light on the fact that, it may be possible that ancient people had developed some other means of transportation between the two villages. Not exactly a boat, but using trees bark to cross the river or something else that is unknown today. They could have used this technique to transfer the Palean baskets.
Hence, we can say that, it might be true that woven baskets were not unique to Palean village but in this case, author's argument does not likely persuade to believe the same.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- not OK. better to say: maybe people from Lithos have boats, in argument 3.
argument 4 -- OK, but not 100%
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 432 350
No. of Characters: 1980 1500
No. of Different Words: 182 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.559 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.583 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.26 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 117 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 42 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 23 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.571 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.877 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.714 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.343 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.583 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.131 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 48, Rule ID: HE_THE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'about the specific'?
Suggestion: about the specific
... argument that so-called Palean baskets about he specific woven baskets might be true but this ar...
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Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... river might be shallow in ancient time, but due to some geographical changes it ...
^^
Line 3, column 298, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'have'
Suggestion: have
...e, people living in Palea village would had easily crossed the river and imitated t...
^^^
Line 3, column 376, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...ted the woven baskets in Lithos village also. Or it may be the case that in ancient...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, moreover, really, second, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.6327345309 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.9520958084 131% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 28.8173652695 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 16.3942115768 30% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2041.0 2260.96107784 90% => OK
No of words: 432.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72453703704 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55901411391 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.30853662511 2.78398813304 83% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.439814814815 0.468620217663 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 625.5 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 4.96107784431 302% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.22255489022 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 19.7664670659 106% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1968386224 57.8364921388 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1904761905 119.503703932 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.61904761905 5.70786347227 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.67664670659 214% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223661975438 0.218282227539 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0785206947992 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0678150473514 0.0701772020484 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114683621955 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0684951353219 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.3799401198 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 48.3550499002 141% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 12.197005988 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 12.5979740519 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.04 8.32208582834 85% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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