Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The argument propounds that baskets with a particular distinctive patter are exclusive to the vicinity of a prehistoric village of Palea which has been countered by a recent archaeological discovery. However, certained flawed assumptions of the argument and the reasearch raises several queries.
The assumption of the argument that such peculiar basktes exclusively belong to the Palean people is dubious. What if the village of Palea was the local hub for business among the neighbouring villages and that all such baskets woven by the people indigenious to some other locality had to be brought to Palea for sale? This is a possibility which has not been addressed by the argument. An extensive survey of the historical significance and status of the people who resided in Palea and nearby localities could however attempt to provide some hint regarding the same.
On the other hand, the archaeological discovery has been vaguely concluded without proper evidences. Discovery of a single Palean basket in Lithos as inferred from ('such a "Palean" basket') cannot merely conclude its multiple orgins. How many such baskets where found in entire non-Palean localities? Where such baskets also found in far to reach places from Palea ? The absence of any vestiges of the Palean boats cannot engender a conclusion that the Palean people could have not travelled to Lithos. What if there has been a wanton destruction of the village due some plausible rivalry or communal war which could have lead to lack of any such evidences? Did the findings scavenge for the possibilty of an ersatz route to Lithos via which the Palen people could have communted to the village? Such questions could plausibly strengthen the claim of the discovery.
Though the argument or evidence presented could ultimately be valid, the probity and the authenticity of either of them cannot be ascribed with the current stand which lacks a depth of detail. Furnishing further clarifications to the questions posited above would definitely buttress the claim.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: However, certained flawed assumptions of the argument and the reasearch raises several queries.
Error: certained Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: reasearch Suggestion: research
Sentence: The assumption of the argument that such peculiar basktes exclusively belong to the Palean people is dubious.
Error: basktes Suggestion: baskets
Sentence: Discovery of a single Palean basket in Lithos as inferred from 'such a 'Palean' basket' cannot merely conclude its multiple orgins.
Error: orgins Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Did the findings scavenge for the possibilty of an ersatz route to Lithos via which the Palen people could have communted to the village?
Error: scavenge Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: communted Suggestion: commuted
Error: possibilty Suggestion: possibility
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 326 350
No. of Characters: 1676 1500
No. of Different Words: 176 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.249 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.141 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.762 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 131 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.375 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.688 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.375 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.335 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.519 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.095 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 170, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... basket in Lithos as inferred from such a 'Palean' basket cannot merely...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, regarding, so, then, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1723.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28527607362 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89687524841 2.78398813304 104% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.552147239264 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3190891367 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.6875 119.503703932 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.375 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.875 5.70786347227 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205663903765 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0673423368314 0.0743258471296 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0557609186799 0.0701772020484 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118085298005 0.128457276422 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0760912695705 0.0628817314937 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 12.5979740519 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.38 8.32208582834 113% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 98.500998004 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 12.3882235529 121% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 79.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.75 Out of 6
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