Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia. Using an observation-centered approach to studying Tertian culture, he concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. Recently another anthropologist, Dr. Karp, visited the group of islands that includes Tertia and used the interview-centered method to study child-rearing practices. In the interviews that Dr. Karp conducted with children living in this group of islands, the children spent much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. Dr. Karp decided that Dr. Field's conclusion about Tertian village culture must be invalid. Some anthropologists recommend that to obtain accurate information on Tertian child-rearing practices, future research on the subject should be conducted via the interview-centered method.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument asserts that further research must be conducted on the Tertial child-rearing practices via the interview-centered method to obtain accurate information. The argument is based on several underlying assumptions which are flawed and there is a dearth of proper pieces of evidences as delineated below.
Firstly, the argument takes a major leap by assuming interview-centered approach superior to observation-centered approach. Was a thorough comparative analysis of these two approaches as a technique to study child rearing practices conducted, and what were the results of such a comparision? The argument merely proposes two anthropologist, using different approaches, concluding a varied result. But what gurantees the superiority of interview centered method than observation centered ? The argument could make transparent the underlying comparisions made to corroborate to its decision.
Secondly, owing to the immense developments in the field of technology in the past decades, did the recent anthrapological study withness advanced and accurate methodologies which were more reliable than a method used twenty years ago? This is an absolute plausibility and the argument could assert the authencity of this to gauge the reliability of the techniques used to derive the conclusion.
Another major fallacy is in the comparision of datas which differ in time over a period of twenty whole years. It wouldn't be feasible to gainsay the possibility of a probable nontrivial gentic change ascribed to the adaptability, which would render such a comparision invalid. The biology of the inhabitants could have changed over such a large period of time. An absence of any evidence to refute such a possiblity weakens the argument.
The conclusion of Dr. Karp loses its significance as he ascribes his result to the greater amount of time spent by children in talking about their biological parents than other adults in the village. This could be a possbility but however cannot be concluded as the only reason for such a conclusion. There might be an underlying reason behind the children being reticent about other villagers. Did the study scavenge for such a possibility and what were the findings of such a study? It is the result of such a study that could bolster the claim of the Dr. Karp's conclusion.
Ultimately, notwithstanding the plausibility of the argument being valid, such a stand cannot be taken with the current disposition. The argument could furnish the reader with answers to the aforementioned questions and assert the reliability of the assumptions for the thorough scrutiny and assimilation of the conclusion provided.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: Was a thorough comparative analysis of these two approaches as a technique to study child rearing practices conducted, and what were the results of such a comparision?
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: But what gurantees the superiority of interview centered method than observation centered ?
Error: gurantees Suggestion: guarantees
Sentence: The argument could make transparent the underlying comparisions made to corroborate to its decision.
Error: comparisions Suggestion: comparisons
Sentence: Secondly, owing to the immense developments in the field of technology in the past decades, did the recent anthrapological study withness advanced and accurate methodologies which were more reliable than a method used twenty years ago?
Error: anthrapological Suggestion: anthropological
Error: withness Suggestion: witness
Sentence: This is an absolute plausibility and the argument could assert the authencity of this to gauge the reliability of the techniques used to derive the conclusion.
Error: authencity Suggestion: authority
Sentence: Another major fallacy is in the comparision of datas which differ in time over a period of twenty whole years.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Sentence: It wouldn't be feasible to gainsay the possibility of a probable nontrivial gentic change ascribed to the adaptability, which would render such a comparision invalid.
Error: comparision Suggestion: comparison
Error: wouldn Suggestion: would
Error: gentic Suggestion: genetic
Error: gainsay Suggestion: gains
Sentence: An absence of any evidence to refute such a possiblity weakens the argument.
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Sentence: This could be a possbility but however cannot be concluded as the only reason for such a conclusion.
Error: possbility Suggestion: possibility
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 12 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 412 350
No. of Characters: 2205 1500
No. of Different Words: 211 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.505 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.352 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.258 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 167 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 131 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 105 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 65 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.96 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.25 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.577 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.062 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'anthropologist' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'anthropologists'.
Suggestion: anthropologists
...ision? The argument merely proposes two anthropologist, using different approaches, concluding...
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Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...over a period of twenty whole years. It wouldnt be feasible to gainsay the possibility ...
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Line 7, column 346, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ts could have changed over such a large period of time. An absence of any evidence to refute s...
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Line 9, column 228, Rule ID: BUT_NEVERTHELESS[1]
Message: Use simply 'but'.
Suggestion: but
...the village. This could be a possbility but however cannot be concluded as the only reason ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 28.8173652695 45% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 16.3942115768 104% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2255.0 2260.96107784 100% => OK
No of words: 411.0 441.139720559 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.48661800487 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.56307096286 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.32552528741 2.78398813304 119% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523114355231 0.468620217663 112% => OK
syllable_count: 714.6 705.55239521 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.5116557769 57.8364921388 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.75 119.503703932 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.55 23.324526521 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.75 5.70786347227 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.182596725829 0.218282227539 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055379487362 0.0743258471296 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0499039373708 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.085710638544 0.128457276422 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0685546226748 0.0628817314937 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 14.3799401198 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 12.5979740519 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.32208582834 115% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 98.500998004 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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