A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Whether a nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college is an issue which has very recently garnered a lot of attention and mustered voices speaking for and against in on national televisions and media. Owing to the series of inconceivable mishappenings in recent times due to the absence of such an imposition, it is evidently manifest that the nation must homogenize the curriculum for all of its school students.
Recently, in India, which happens to provide a plethora of curriculums for school students to enrol into, they had announced a common entrance examination for medical students- NEET Examination. The Government had made it compulsory for all the students to clear this examination in order to secure a seat in a medical college in the country. But the NEET examination was exclusively based on one particular, superior curriculum of the country. The objective analysis of the Government to improve the selection standards for medical colleges by introducing NEET exam proved inimical when an MBBS aspirant, Anitha, committed suicide since she had studied in an ersatz curriculum owing to the parsimonious conditions of her family and due to the fact that the Government behaved insensitively to her pleas. Her futile attempts to reconcile to her fate of not being able to pursue MBBS studies resorted her to such a decision. Had the nation structured a uniform curriculum for all the students, would we have encountered such a loss of an asset of the nation? Absolutely not! The selection of the curriculum based on fiscal eligibilities led to such an insidious separation and non-uniformity in the knowledge acquired.
While the sceptics oppose such a uniform curriculum with their tenacious claims stating the requirement of a cheaper and affordable course of education for the lower classes, this passage attempts to kindle a spark in the reader's mind-if knowledge was to be distributed based on financial capabilities? Erudite scholars, however, have countered such flawed argument by saying that it is indubitably the responsibility of the Government of a nation of make knowledge disseminate to the entire masses without applying any filters of qualification of receiving masses. As the dictum goes, 'Education is the most powerful weapon which one can use to change the world'- everyone must be offered a superior course of education which doesn't discriminate the learners based on their backgrounds.
Such an unbiased educational system can come into existence only by homogenizing the curriculum for the students which would engender a uniform learning scheme and hence a fair and just competition amongst all the students and would undoubtedly eradicate any possible mishappenings by guaranteeing a fair and just educational provision for all.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, so, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.5258426966 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 66.0 58.6224719101 113% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2391.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 449.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.32516703786 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60321845022 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1091361893 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 215.323595506 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516703786192 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 778.5 704.065955056 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 23.0359550562 148% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.6212207005 60.3974514979 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 183.923076923 118.986275619 155% => OK
Words per sentence: 34.5384615385 23.4991977007 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.15384615385 5.21951772744 60% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 10.2758426966 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227497540746 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878378112103 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.085792136201 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152523276933 0.150359130593 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0928417220134 0.0667264976115 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.9 14.1392134831 148% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.51 48.8420337079 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 14.6 7.92365168539 184% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 12.1743820225 145% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.23 12.1639044944 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.21 8.38706741573 122% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 100.480337079 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.6 11.2143820225 139% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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