Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The arguement above states that a particular kind of basket, previously thought to be made exclusively in Palea, is now found in Lithos, a town across the Brim River from Palea. Because the river Brim could only be traversed by boats and no boats were found, it is unlikely that the basket could have traveled there from Palea. Therefore, the people of Lithos must have made those baskets and the baskets are not exclusively from Palean. However, this arguement is lacking several critical foundations. More evidences should be gathered to determine if the result can be supported by the reasoning provided.
First of such evidences is regarding the lack of Palean boats found. Even though we have not found any boats around Palean, it is still possible that the ancient people of Palean possess the ability of make boats that could traverse the Brim river. In particular, because boats are usually kept around the river, the flow of a strong river could have flushed all remaining of boats from the ancient times downtream, removing all evidences of boat around Palean. If archeologists later found that there are boats downstream near the coast of the Brim river that bears the characistic of the village of Palean, it would be a strong evident detracting the arguement made in the prompt. The finding of the Palean basket could have been due to trade between the two villages, enabled by the ability to traverse the river.
Even if no Palean boat is found, trade between the village of Palean and Lithos could have still existed. Lithos villagers could have possessed boats that are able to across the Brim river and reach Palean. Even though a villager from Palean never landed food on the other side of the Brim river, the Palean basket could have been bought and brought home by Lithos merchants. If this is the case, and that boats are found near the site of Lithos (or downstream), the existence of the Palean basket near Lithos does not prove that the people of Lithos made them. There is sill possibility that the Palean basket is made exclusivly by the people of Palean. Therefore, the reasoning of the prompt is not sound.
The state of the Brim river at the time when villege of Palean exists should be studies as well. It is well-known that river changes rapily due to the topological changes of the surrounding landmass. At the time when Palean existed, the Brim river could be a lot shallower and narrower than it is now. Thus the people from Palean could have tranversed the river without a boat. This way, trade of the Palean basket could have happened even without the existence of Palean boat. Therefore, if geological evidences show that the Brim river was smaller during ancient time, the arguement above would lose significant validity.
In summation, even though the existence of a Palean basket in Lithos and the lack of Palean boat finding give possiblity that Palean baskets might not be exclusivly made by Palean people. The existent evidences is not enough to claim that that is neccesarily the case. In fact, evidences from other archeological finding like Palean boats in other areas or Lithos boats that cound traverse the river, and geological evidences that support the possibility that the Brim river was less torrent than it is now, could seriously cast doubts on the claim that Palean basket is not exclusvely Palean. More evidences should be gethered before a conclusive claim like the one made by the prompt can be reached.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The arguement above states that a particular kind of basket, previously thought to be made exclusively in Palea, is now found in Lithos, a town across the Brim River from Palea.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: However, this arguement is lacking several critical foundations.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: In particular, because boats are usually kept around the river, the flow of a strong river could have flushed all remaining of boats from the ancient times downtream, removing all evidences of boat around Palean.
Error: downtream Suggestion: downstream
Sentence: If archeologists later found that there are boats downstream near the coast of the Brim river that bears the characistic of the village of Palean, it would be a strong evident detracting the arguement made in the prompt.
Error: detracting Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Error: characistic Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: There is sill possibility that the Palean basket is made exclusivly by the people of Palean.
Error: exclusivly Suggestion: exclusively
Sentence: The state of the Brim river at the time when villege of Palean exists should be studies as well.
Error: villege Suggestion: village
Sentence: It is well-known that river changes rapily due to the topological changes of the surrounding landmass.
Error: landmass Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: rapily Suggestion: rapidly
Error: well-known Suggestion: well known
Sentence: Thus the people from Palean could have tranversed the river without a boat.
Error: tranversed Suggestion: traversed
Sentence: Therefore, if geological evidences show that the Brim river was smaller during ancient time, the arguement above would lose significant validity.
Error: arguement Suggestion: argument
Sentence: In summation, even though the existence of a Palean basket in Lithos and the lack of Palean boat finding give possiblity that Palean baskets might not be exclusivly made by Palean people.
Error: possiblity Suggestion: possibility
Error: exclusivly Suggestion: exclusively
Sentence: The existent evidences is not enough to claim that that is neccesarily the case.
Error: neccesarily Suggestion: necessarily
Sentence: In fact, evidences from other archeological finding like Palean boats in other areas or Lithos boats that cound traverse the river, and geological evidences that support the possibility that the Brim river was less torrent than it is now, could seriously cast doubts on the claim that Palean basket is not exclusvely Palean.
Error: exclusvely Suggestion: exclusively
Error: cound Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: More evidences should be gethered before a conclusive claim like the one made by the prompt can be reached.
Error: gethered Suggestion: gathered
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 15 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 592 350
No. of Characters: 2814 1500
No. of Different Words: 207 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.933 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.753 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.344 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 194 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 116 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 77 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 59 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.769 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.226 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.577 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.377 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.527 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.145 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 707, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e reasoning of the prompt is not sound. The state of the Brim river at the time ...
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Line 7, column 303, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... shallower and narrower than it is now. Thus the people from Palean could have tranv...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, well, in fact, in particular, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 36.0 19.6327345309 183% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 13.6137724551 154% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 79.0 55.5748502994 142% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2881.0 2260.96107784 127% => OK
No of words: 592.0 441.139720559 134% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86655405405 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93265142912 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41047652417 2.78398813304 87% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 204.123752495 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.364864864865 0.468620217663 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 890.1 705.55239521 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.8822439133 57.8364921388 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.807692308 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7692307692 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.69230769231 5.70786347227 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.67664670659 235% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.446097839323 0.218282227539 204% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.161479355629 0.0743258471296 217% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.158422388917 0.0701772020484 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.329664595894 0.128457276422 257% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.195436062446 0.0628817314937 311% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.31 8.32208582834 88% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 98.500998004 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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