Nations should pass laws to preserve any remaining wilderness areas in their natural state, even if these areas could be developed for economic gain.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
The balance between nature preservation and economic development is one that is difficult to achieve. The prompt claims that a nation should make law that would protect the remaining wilderness even if these area could be useful for economic gains. This claim is too broad and the choice between protact the environment and aconomic development should be make depending on the inviduaul situation. A calculation of benefit and harm should be made to decide if each area should be preserved for wild life or used for industry or commercial activity. Morreover, other policies could be passed to protect the environment while not hurting economic development.
A law that protects wilderness above all else, especially economic gain, it too harsh for developing countries. It is natrual for a nation's economy to go through the trasition period where exploitation of natral resources is neccessary. A country, without enough capital to start, needs to sell it's land or resources beneath those wilderness land to obtain enough capital. After this initial period, the nation have the capital to educate it's citizens, develope it's infranstrucuter, and attract global investment to maintain a healthy economy without the exploitation of natrual resources. The nation could pass law to retore the wilderness it took away. It could even invest in the development of new renewable energy technology, reducing its dependence on natural resources. However, if a law that put nature above all else was implimented in a poor, developing counties, its economy might stagnate. The country would be stuck in the phase where to survive, the nation's population needs to constantly extract natrual resources and open new land. In the long term, this will harm the environment more.
The prompt ignores the global scale of environment protection. It is not enough for one country to deal with environment destruction, every nations needs to address this issue. Especially, poor countries should reach out for help from developed countries to make the transition to renewable energy and sustainable economy, reducing the needs to exploitation of large amount of natural resources. The developed countries should set set funding to help developing countries and share technologies for renewable energy. Passing law that prioritize the enviroment is good, but a global coordination is more effective.
The prompt acts as if a nation can only protact the environment at the cost of its economy. There are more ways where the wilderness of a nation could be preserved without interfering with economic development. For example, a nation could pass law that encourage recycling from its citizens. This law motivates its population to participate in protecting the environment. More importantly, a nation could pass law to regulate the wasts its industry could emit. In many cases, wilderness land is ruined not becasue the exploitation of the new land, but bacause of the contamited water or air polluting a wilderness area. If the law that protect the environment by restricing economic growth is the only law about envirnment protection, all other factor might be ignored and the evnvironment might not get better but worse.
In summation, a law that preserve the wilderness by stopping economic development is ill-advised. Rather, a nation should deliberate between the two options, the environment and its economy. At the same time, a nation should seek international help and pass other laws to protect the environment.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this area' or 'these areas'?
Suggestion: this area; these areas
...rotect the remaining wilderness even if these area could be useful for economic gains. Thi...
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Line 1, column 356, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'made'?
Suggestion: made
...ment and aconomic development should be make depending on the inviduaul situation. A...
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Line 3, column 133, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...veloping countries. It is natrual for a nations economy to go through the trasition per...
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Line 3, column 326, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this wilderness' or 'those wildernesses'?
Suggestion: this wilderness; those wildernesses
...s to sell its land or resources beneath those wilderness land to obtain enough capital. After th...
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Line 3, column 965, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...tuck in the phase where to survive, the nations population needs to constantly extract ...
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Line 5, column 428, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: set
...sources. The developed countries should set set funding to help developing countries an...
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Line 5, column 452, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[5]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to develop' or 'develop'.
Suggestion: to develop; develop
...ountries should set set funding to help developing countries and share technologies for re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, while, for example, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 12.4196629213 185% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 38.0 12.9106741573 294% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2959.0 2235.4752809 132% => OK
No of words: 553.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35081374322 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.84932490483 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99245148386 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 247.0 215.323595506 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.446654611212 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 931.5 704.065955056 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 18.0 4.99550561798 360% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0278464642 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.034482759 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0689655172 23.4991977007 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.89655172414 5.21951772744 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.326392396627 0.243740707755 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0984757660249 0.0831039109588 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0740443620011 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205363031396 0.150359130593 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0779603123862 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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