Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.
Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.
The above arguement claims that a government must funnel funds into large cities in it country to ensure that they are prosperous because that would be beneficial to the preservation of important national cultural tradisions. It is true that a government should ensure the development of its major cities, however, culture preservation should not be its major reason. There are better ways to protect a nations traditional cultures that does not involve investing in mega-cities.
Endangered cultural traditions usually exist in provincial regions. Because the limited population and poor ecomonic situation, the regional traditional cultures do not receive the attention and publication they need to survive the new generation. The exodus of young people from the countryside to major cities also derive traditional cultures precious human resources. On the other hand, cultural traditions that exist in major metropolitan areas usually is already popular and it well documented and publicized by their supporters. Citizens of major cities also is relative more well-off and can afford to spend their expendable income to support their favorate cultural products. Therefore, if the government really want to make an effort to preserve its most endangered cultural traditions, it should invest in developing rural areas and bring more exposure to unknwon traditional culture.
However, government should not ignore the development of major cities. Major cities are the major sources of income of a nation. Tax revenue from commerce and industry is usually higher than that from agriculture. A prosperous metropolitan area would generate the income the government needs to fund its many project, generating a gain for the government's investment. In particular, government could transfer its income from major cities to rural areas. And as I argued in the previous paragraph, development in rural areas is beneficial to the preservation of cultural traditions.
The prompt is right on claiming that major cities are where cultural traditions are preserved and generated. Therefore it might be beneficial that cultural traditions from the countryside to introduced to population in metropolitan areas. This will help endangered traditions to receive the appropiate amount of supporter it needs to survive. More money might be invested to the effort of promting and preserving of the cultural tradition. Moreover, clash of ideas from existing culture in the city and newly introduced cultural traditions give more chances of new cultures being produced. However, this does not simply traslate into more investment into major cities. On the contrary, governmental funds should be spent to find those endangered cultural traditions and set up institutions in major cities to publicize them. It is a collaborative effort by the rural and urban areas that is the more effactive in promting the preservation and generation of cultural traditions.
In summation, the logic that to best preserve and generate a nation's cultural traditions, major funding should be given to large cities for them to thirve is tenuous. Rather, appropriate funding should be given to both urban and rural areas. This way, the nation's ecomony would be healthy, endangered traditional cultures could receive the attention it needs, and new cultural traditions would be created.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 402, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...eason. There are better ways to protect a nations traditional cultures that does not invo...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ious human resources. On the other hand, cultural traditions that exist in major ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...endable income to support their favorate cultural products. Therefore, if the gov...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...n effort to preserve its most endangered cultural traditions, it should invest in...
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Line 5, column 305, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun project seems to be countable; consider using: 'many projects'.
Suggestion: many projects
...income the government needs to fund its many project, generating a gain for the governments ...
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Line 5, column 345, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'governments'' or 'government's'?
Suggestion: governments'; government's
...many project, generating a gain for the governments investment. In particular, government c...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eas is beneficial to the preservation of cultural traditions. The prompt is ri...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...traditions are preserved and generated. Therefore it might be beneficial that cultural tr...
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Line 9, column 60, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a nation' or simply 'nations'?
Suggestion: a nation; nations
...ogic that to best preserve and generate a nations cultural traditions, major funding shou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, moreover, really, so, therefore, well, in particular, it is true, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 68.0 58.6224719101 116% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2845.0 2235.4752809 127% => OK
No of words: 512.0 442.535393258 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.556640625 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97110759081 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43359375 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 907.2 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 43.6524228843 60.3974514979 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.423076923 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57692307692 5.21951772744 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332423706497 0.243740707755 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111721168983 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700382224622 0.0758088955206 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216103538049 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0500329442702 0.0667264976115 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.27 48.8420337079 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.1639044944 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.