Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The arguer states that woven baskets, characterized by a distinctive pattern have been previously found only in the immediate vicinity of the pre-historic village of Palea. Therefore, they could have been made only by the Palean people. However, a recent discovery of a Palean basket has been made in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. Since the Brim River is very deep and broad, and since there were no Palean boats discovered, it has been concluded that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean. The evidences on which the arguer has based the conclusion has a few loopholes in it that casts doubt on the conclusion itself.
Firstly, the fact that no Palean boats have been found does not conclusively end the possibility that Palean people did not cross the Brim River. There could be a possibility that the boats have not been discovered yet. And a through survey of the Palean village site can provide evidences, hinting towards that fact that boats existed during the time when the Palean village was inhabited. There can also be a possibility of the boats getting destroyed due to a sudden onset of heavy rains that triggered huge flooding of the area that can be the reason for the destruction of their mode of transporting across the river. This could mean that the distinctive patterns, found on the woven baskets were unique to the Palean inhabitants and probably they would go across the river to sell the woven baskets in the Lithos village.
Secondly, the discovery of a single Palean Basket does not prove the point that the distinctive pattern on the woven basket was not unique to the Palean people. There are numerous possibilities owing to which the Palean basket might have reached across the river. There could be a possibility that the inhabitants of the Lithos village raided Palea, and took with them, a handful of Palean baskets on the way back. This would co-incide with the arguer’s statement that there were no Palean boats found, but there could be a possibility that the residents of Lithos village approached Palea and took with them the Palean baskets that were unique to Palea only. This would again cast a doubt on the arguer’s conclusion which states that the Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The points that the arguer puts forth in his dissertation has many loopholes that have been elaborated upon in the previous couple of paragraphs. And, until these points have been attended to, one cannot accept the conclusion that the arguer has come up with.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 431 350
No. of Characters: 2071 1500
No. of Different Words: 168 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.556 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.805 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.434 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 137 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 82 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 55 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.353 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.317 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.353 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.417 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.575 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.194 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 227, Rule ID: THROUGH_THOROUGH[1]
Message: Did you mean 'thorough' (accurate, exhaustive)?
Suggestion: thorough
...ats have not been discovered yet. And a through survey of the Palean village site can p...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.9520958084 100% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 13.6137724551 176% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 55.5748502994 92% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2123.0 2260.96107784 94% => OK
No of words: 431.0 441.139720559 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92575406032 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49856306377 2.78398813304 90% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.412993039443 0.468620217663 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 653.4 705.55239521 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2149167861 57.8364921388 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.882352941 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3529411765 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94117647059 5.70786347227 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.20758483034 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389229204143 0.218282227539 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151607504975 0.0743258471296 204% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110829534673 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.254555348815 0.128457276422 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.1233252835 0.0628817314937 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.7 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 98.500998004 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 12.3882235529 93% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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