Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a Palean basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author of the letter contend that Palean baskets were not indigenous to Palean, because of absent evidence of boats and such baskets found in Lithos. However, in my opinion, some evidence should be presented to further illustrate the author's argument.
First of all, given the evidence that, nowadays, the Brim River is so deep and broad that it is impossible for ancient people to cross it, the author argues that in ancient, there was must be a such huge river impeding the connection between Lithos and Palean people. More evidence is required to evaluate the validity of such view. Over thousands of years, the topography of this area must have been highly changed, thus it is more likely that in ancient, this river did not appear. In this case, people from different village could trade with each other. Clearly, more specific geographic evidence is needed to eliminate such possibility.
Apart from that, the author uses the fact that no Palean boats had been found as an evidence to support his or her argument. Nevertheless, we need evidence to ascertain whether there were not any relic of boats or other transportation tools. In fact, in ancient, the technology was not highly developed, so if Palean people really had built boats to help them cross the river, those kinds of boats were made of lumber. Clearly, lumber is not a durable resource that would decay over long period of time. Therefore, even if Palean people had boats, present scientists hardly found any clues relevant with them. To establish the argument strongly, the author has to found more evidence for supporting.
Finally, even though it is true that Palean people did not have any implements for transporting, we still need to found some evidence to verify that different village could hardly trade with each other. Because of the shortage of natural resources, different village had to trade with other communities to exchange some daily products. Thus, actually, there were numerous trades happened among the ancient society. Despite impossibility of direct connect with Lithos people, those baskets still would be able to exist in Lithos. Obviously, more evidence are requiring to prove the validity of conclusion.
In a nutshell, while the conclusion in the letter is seemingly decisive and unmistakable, the author still needs more evidence to further proving it.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 387 350
No. of Characters: 1915 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.435 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.948 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.439 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 98 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 66 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 33 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.368 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.56 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.328 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.116 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 239, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... be presented to further illustrate the authors argument. First of all, given the ev...
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Line 5, column 489, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
...ble resource that would decay over long period of time. Therefore, even if Palean people had b...
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Line 7, column 569, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'proving'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: proving
... Obviously, more evidence are requiring to prove the validity of conclusion. In a nut...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, finally, first, however, if, nevertheless, really, so, still, therefore, thus, while, apart from, as to, in fact, first of all, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 55.5748502994 97% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1983.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 387.0 441.139720559 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12403100775 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55061142723 2.78398813304 92% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 204.123752495 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503875968992 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 620.1 705.55239521 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 11.0 4.22255489022 261% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1666474939 57.8364921388 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.368421053 119.503703932 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3684210526 23.324526521 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57894736842 5.70786347227 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129924399416 0.218282227539 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413308334036 0.0743258471296 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0412074730161 0.0701772020484 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0726216189545 0.128457276422 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382412972766 0.0628817314937 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 48.3550499002 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.197005988 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 98.500998004 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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