70. The following appeared in a newsletter offering advice to investors.
"Over 80 percent of the respondents to a recent survey indicated a desire to reduce their intake of foods containing fats and cholesterol, and today low-fat products abound in many food stores. Since many of the food products currently marketed by Old Dairy Industries are high in fat and cholesterol, the company's sales are likely to diminish greatly and company profits will no doubt decrease. We therefore advise Old Dairy stockholders to sell their shares, and other investors not to purchase stock in this company."
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order to decide whether the advice and the argument on which it is based are reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the advice.
In the letter, the author of it contend that the Old Dairy stockholders had better sell out their shares in order to decrease the potential loss and persuade others not to purchase it any more. While the suggestion might be reasonable to some extents, there are questions that the author should answer before he or she prove the validity of argument.
To begin with, the author assumes that since over 80 percent interviewers are determining to curtail fats and cholesterol contained in their daily food, the sales of Old Dairy would be obviously diminished. However, I wonder what is the exact number of total participants in such survey. To be more specific, if the total number of interviewers are relatively small, the result will not be regarded as a strong data to support the author's argument. There will be numerous specific or special situation occurring, thus their answer could not be objective. Therefore, answering the question would reinforce the conclusion.
Apart from that, the letter contends the increasing amounts of low-fat products sold in many food stores can be a reason to repudiate the stock of Old Dairy. Nevertheless, the author has to answer another question to make his or her argument valid: where were the stores stated in the letter located? If the food stores are around the hospitals or care centers, where the patients are inclined to imbibe healthy food to maintain their condition and recover rapidly, these stores nearby would offer low-fat products to obtain profits. On the other hand, the community of poor people can afford the prohibitive price of divergent types of snake containing fat or cholesterol, they would not consider the products on their purchasing lists. Therefore, the location of stores is a determinant of the result.
Finally,
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 2.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 294 350
No. of Characters: 1462 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.141 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.973 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.608 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 111 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 57 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.615 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.028 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.923 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.314 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.556 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.08 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 320, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'proves'.
Suggestion: proves
...e author should answer before he or she prove the validity of argument. To begin w...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 432, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...egarded as a strong data to support the authors argument. There will be numerous specif...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 9, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a determinant of the result. Finally,
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, apart from, as to, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 28.8173652695 62% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1505.0 2260.96107784 67% => OK
No of words: 294.0 441.139720559 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11904761905 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70015116735 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.595238095238 0.468620217663 127% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.7981143228 57.8364921388 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.416666667 119.503703932 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.58333333333 5.70786347227 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 5.15768463074 58% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193002260671 0.218282227539 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639847570197 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807308841414 0.0701772020484 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113889055748 0.128457276422 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0788439551592 0.0628817314937 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.5979740519 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.32208582834 114% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 98.500998004 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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