Universities should spend more money improving facilities, such as libraries, computer labs, than hiring famous teachers.
Some people contend that university should focus on the invent of infrastructure, as it is able to benefit students. However, I hold the opposite view that the priority of college is making sure the high standard of teachers it hires.
Admittedly, some might disprove me that university should regard improving facilities as their priority. This is because those infrastructures are definitely helpful to students. For instance, offering computer labs warrants that whenever students desired to gather around information for their researches or assignments, they could head to the labs, using the computer with convenience. Thus, they do not necessarily take their own laptops to the classes, which makes it unlikely for them to get distracted by the games or social platforms on it. However, in my opinion, with the development of smartphone, students now can search for almost everything useful on their phones, instead of using computers. Also, another disadvantage is the prohibitive cost of facilities. As a result, the money invented into facilities are in vain.
In great contrast, hiring famous teachers brings benefits for students, as teachers who are in high reputation enable to promote students' educational performance. In other word, students are accessible to those famous teachers with high-level abilities of tutoring students and experience in teaching. So, such teachers are capable of motivating student's interests to studying, which evokes the initiative in each one. To be more specific, when I stepped into the university, I always bypassed the diverse class, since I thought my major was quite boring and there was not any enthusiasm in classes. Nevertheless, I came to change when I had Miss Wang's financial classes. She was quite famous and professional in economy field in my city. She could teach those knowledge points in a vivid way by different methods, like telling a story, letting us to watch a related movie and so on. During that period, I was charmed by her tremendous skills in studying and felt her ingenuosity in tutoring each student. Affected by her, I have immersed myself in finance now and become a superior student in my college.
More importantly, famous teachers have positive effects on university. Teachers with high repute are always educational and professional in their own fields. They would work harder than others and dedicate much effort and time into researches, all of which would lead to a fact that they could attain and complete numerous achievements and essays that can be presented on journals. So, the more famous essays are in the top journal, the more reputation the university can receive. With the increasing repute, the university would be sponsored by government to augment its educational standards further more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...contend that university should focus on the invent of infrastructure, as it is able to ben...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a vivid way" with adverb for "vivid"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
... She could teach those knowledge points in a vivid way by different methods, like telling a st...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, nevertheless, so, thus, for instance, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2350.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29279279279 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.93036281293 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572072072072 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.9990128016 48.9658058833 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.173913043 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3043478261 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.60869565217 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225020069759 0.236089414692 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0579313231975 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0589119229445 0.0737576698707 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117138186834 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0278364046187 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 58.1214874552 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.4 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.24 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 86.8835125448 151% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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