Students can benefit just as much from extracurricular activities as they can from attending classes.
Some people may contend that having classes is main resource of requiring knowledge, while students will not acquire much in extra curriculums. However, I hold the opposite view that benefits from extra curriculums is equal to formal classes, if students can immerse themselves into them.
Admittedly, some voices rise that the sterling studying atmosphere provided by college classes is indispensable, where each student would be more able to be preoccupied with teachers. Without smartphones, computers and other attractions, students' attention is on the textbook. Also, with numerous sponsorships, it is no doubt that colleges are equipped with the most experienced teachers and advanced implements that facilitates students' learning. It is true that students do receive a unique situation when attending classes. However, in my opinion, there are something essential that they would not attain in the formal classes.
In great contrast, having extra curriculums has a certain benefit for students’ development. It is generally acknowledged that the ability of dealing with interpersonal relationship is so significant that each company are inclined to those employees with outstanding personal charm. In the extra activities, students would get a chance to meet with other ones with different backgrounds. In daily communication, they would make friends with divergent people, which assuredly helps them to be socially adept. For an example, when I stepped into university, I participated in English corner in my university, where many students would exercise their English skills. People there were quite friendly, because we all had same hobby. Gradually, I became familiar with a bunch of diverse people. Whenever we got together, we would have constant discussions about our daily life, hobbies and ambitions. During that time, I got a chance to build interpersonal relationship successfully.
More importantly, another benefit is that attending activities is an excellent way for students to figure their interests which would help them to make some significant determination. In those activities, students would be able to have different experiences they never had before, from which they might find out their truly love in their life. Get back to the example stated above. To be honest, English was nightmare for me in junior high school, for its complicate grammar and thousands of vocabularies. However, after I took part in the English corner in university, I get attracted to English itself. I found it excited to communicate with others in a different language, which brings me not only interests but confidence of speaking and using it. As a result, I determined studying abroad in postgraduate program. In such case, had not I attended extra activities, I would not be able to have such ambition today.
In a nutshell, I still remain that sometimes it is likely that students can achieve and acquire more in activities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: PERSONAL_OPINION_FRIENDSHIP[1]
Message: Use simply 'charm'.
Suggestion: charm
...ned to those employees with outstanding personal charm. In the extra activities, students woul...
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Line 9, column 117, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...achieve and acquire more in activities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, still, while, no doubt, as a result, in my opinion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 10.4613686534 210% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 5.04856512141 277% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 7.30242825607 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 12.0772626932 174% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 22.412803532 245% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 30.3222958057 204% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 5.01324503311 140% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2496.0 1373.03311258 182% => OK
No of words: 458.0 270.72406181 169% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.44978165939 5.08290768461 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.04702891845 114% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06010734689 2.5805825403 119% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 145.348785872 175% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.554585152838 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 773.1 419.366225166 184% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.55342163355 109% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 3.25607064018 430% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 1.25165562914 559% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 13.0 2.5761589404 505% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 13.0662251656 191% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 21.2450331126 85% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.1573371345 49.2860985944 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.84 110.228320801 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.32 21.698381199 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8 7.06452816374 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 4.33554083885 369% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 4.45695364238 22% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191260044694 0.272083759551 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0466083371729 0.0996497079465 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566060458267 0.0662205650399 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124021580052 0.162205337803 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621312818046 0.0443174109184 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.3589403974 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 53.8541721854 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 5.55761589404 158% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.0289183223 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.33 12.2367328918 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.42419426049 106% => OK
difficult_words: 128.0 63.6247240618 201% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.7273730684 103% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.498013245 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
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Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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