Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been made only by the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could have crossed it only by boat, and no Palean boats have been found. Thus it follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not uniquely Palean.
The author of this argument shows a piece of script that can be used for some interesting thought process in the analysis of the data that we have on the production of these specific woven baskets. The argument is based on the assumption that this Palean village was isolate from the rest of the regions around it meaning that the production of the woven basket could only happen there. However, some further questioning is needed in order to correct the assumptions made.
First of all, the text does not provide us with specific information on precise historical periods. It describes the Palean village as a “prehistoric” establishment and the Lithos village as an “ancient” village. Precision on this point is needed to establish whether Lithos existed before the Palean establishment, reversng the entire thought. If this were to be established then the issue would crumble on itself as the origin of the baskets would be Lithos and not the Palean village.
Furthermore, vague pieces of information are also given regarding the baskets found in the establishment of Lithos. Are they identical or are there some changes in the pattern and overall structure? If so, then a possible connection between the establishments may have existed, especially if we return to the timing issue and establish that the two villages may have existed contemporaneously.
Additionally, the Palena baskets were not found in the “immediate vicinity” but the text does not specify whether the immediate vicinities were inhabitated by other civilizations. This may also result from the fact that those same civilizations may not have been discovered yet. As the text explicitly says, Lithos has been discovered recently, so there may be some residual probability that the immediate vicinities might not have been fully studied yet. Plus, the sample of civilizations analyzed and cited seems to be very small since nothing is said about possible villages existing not in the proximities but still quite close to the Palean village.
Proof of nearby villages may become fundamental for the conclusion of the argument since commercial relationship between the Palean village and these other villages may have existed especially if we consider villages that are not located across the river where trips by land can be easier than by boats in order to cross the Brim River.
Finally, vague words are used to describe the river itself. Words such as “very deep and broad” are not enough to establish the real sizes of the river. Some quantities must be given. It should also be considered that boats in prehistoric times were not too complex and this agrees with the assumption that the river could have been crossed by boat. Still boats may not have been the only means to cross the river. Besides the lack of measures of the size of the river we do not have information about the strength of a current but if weak enough, a river can be crossed also by swimming.
The previous point may be an initial proof of why boats were not found. The Palean people could have established primitive bridges that were across the river that could have been lost through time. Also, they might have crossed the river by boat and came back safely, even more surely if the current was not strong enough) but thoe same boats, being primitive, may have been lost as thousands of years have passed. It could also be that boas at the bottom of the river might have been moved by the current and can be found in other zones down the flow of the river where researchers did not look for.
In conclusion, there are many questions that must be answered in order to validate the point according to which those baskets only come from the palean villages.
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e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 26 15
No. of Words: 629 350
No. of Characters: 3018 1500
No. of Different Words: 263 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.008 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.798 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.552 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 188 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 141 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.192 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.156 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.731 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.303 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.303 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.121 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 268, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'isolated'.
Suggestion: isolated
...assumption that this Palean village was isolate from the rest of the regions around it ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, look, may, regarding, so, still, then, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 41.0 19.6327345309 209% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 27.0 12.9520958084 208% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 17.0 11.1786427146 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 55.5748502994 139% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3108.0 2260.96107784 137% => OK
No of words: 629.0 441.139720559 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94117647059 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.00798087137 4.56307096286 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68608752347 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 273.0 204.123752495 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.434022257552 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 970.2 705.55239521 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 19.7664670659 132% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6738639219 57.8364921388 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.538461538 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1923076923 23.324526521 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.26923076923 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 5.15768463074 155% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 15.0 4.67664670659 321% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.278587030077 0.218282227539 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832450638973 0.0743258471296 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620363809968 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131602517286 0.128457276422 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050467817581 0.0628817314937 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 48.3550499002 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.67 12.5979740519 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.32208582834 95% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 98.500998004 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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