In this age of intensive media coverage, it is no longer possible for a society to regard any living man or woman as a hero.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
As social intensively cover every aspects of people's life nowadays, previously unknown stories are no longer buried.it is therefore reasonable to think that our society cannot consider any living people as heroes because social media could directly uncover the nagative aspects of a person, leading to disillusion of believing that person as a hero. however, in my view it is still possible for modern societies to have heroes, especially seemingly ordinary people, through the power of social media to spread out information and make the unknown known.
Admittedly, social media is disinterested in preserving a person's positive figure for the public. Particularly, political leaders now are more easily criticized because of the unveiling of their personal life through social media. To take a supporting example, park Geunhye was the first female president not only in North Korea but also in Asia. She used to be the hero of korean girls who dreamed of contributing and making changed for their country. Her portrayal as a hero, however, was entirely destroyed after media reports revealed that her close friend, Choi, intervened too much on her decisions and even had access to national secrets. The power of media is able to expose all aspects of park's life, and thereby leads to the breakdown of park as a hero.
In spite of the fact that media could expose disadvantages of existing heroes, media is more capable of exhibiting great stories of the ordinary and making them heroes. news can show virtues of the common people regarding their bravery and sacrifice and thereby shaping new definitions of heroes for the modern society. For instance, in the disaster of sinking of Sewol ferry, a crew member named Kang sacrifised herself to try to save as many as passengers as possible. More than thousands of people petitioned to bury her in the national cemetery, and the korean people will remember her as a hero forever. In this case, social media helped the story of a common person become known by everyone in the country, and the society therefore got a chance to know her and regard her as a hero.
In addition to the possibility that living and ordinary people could become heroes through social media, great people who passed away could also be regarded as heroes in the society. A great many scientists, such as Hawking, made unprecedented and indispensable contributions to human development and scientific progress. How could we ignore them and not respect them as heroes?
In short, it is true that media nowadays can expose the negative aspects of a public leader who would no longer be regarded as heroes. Nevertheless, social media could make more ordinary people, who were previously unknown, become famous for their virtues and thus become new heroes of the modern society. Bedsides, people who made tremendous contributions to the society but passed away are also regarded as heroes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: However
...ion of believing that person as a hero. however, in my view it is still possible for mo...
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...information and make the unknown known. Admittedly, social media is disintereste...
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Suggestion: a person; persons
...al media is disinterested in preserving a persons positive figure for the public. Particu...
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...ads to the breakdown of park as a hero. In spite of the fact that media could ex...
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Suggestion: News
...of the ordinary and making them heroes. news can show virtues of the common people ...
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...hem heroes. news can show virtues of the common people regarding their bravery an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, still, therefore, thus, for instance, in addition, in short, such as, in my view, in spite of, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2452.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 480.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10833333333 5.05705443957 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68203902532 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 215.323595506 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.495833333333 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 788.4 704.065955056 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5939593948 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.052631579 118.986275619 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2631578947 23.4991977007 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.68421052632 5.21951772744 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17303691368 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0573139367166 0.0831039109588 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0361198178946 0.0758088955206 48% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110324964161 0.150359130593 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0274798750887 0.0667264976115 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 14.1392134831 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 100.480337079 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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