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An ailing patient should have easy access to his or her doctor’s record of treating similarly afflicted patients. Through gaining such access, the ailing patient may better determine whether the doctor is competent to treat that medical condition.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

There have been rapid developments in the field of medical sciences in the past few decades. New vaccines and cures have continuously been developed which proved to be efficacious in eradicating some diseases. For example - Polio has almost been eradicated throughout the world. Along with these developments the success in treating a condition also depends on how skilled the doctor treating the condition is. The expertise and experience of a doctor is a highly valuable skill in today's world. There are many well known surgeons, psychiatrists who have made valuable contributions. The confidence a patient has in the doctor depends, indeed, on the the doctor's past experiences and success record. There have been debates around this topic with some advocating a policy where an ailing patient should have access to his/her doctors record of treating previously afflicted patients. I do not completely agree with this view for several reasons.

Firstly, the historical records of patients and doctor's are confidential records. The doctor's might not be comfortable sharing these records in the first place. Sharing the records of a patient and the doctor also means that we need permission from the patient to do so. Since confidentiality is a major concern the proponents of this policy must take this under consideration. If such a policy were to be implemented it would take a lot of time to go through such legal procedures of securing permissions from respective stakeholders.

Secondly, how well can previous records be studied and extrapolated? A similar medical condition might have different effects on different patients. The symptoms faced and the problems resulting from the conditions might not be ubiquitous. Similarly treating the same medical condition might require different procedures for different patients. A cure that worked for a patient previously might not work for the current patient for a myriad of reasons and vice versa. Although, having records of how well a doctor has treated a condition in the past gives the patient some idea about the process, medical conditions are subjective hence their cure too, is subjective.

There are various conditions for whom cure has not been found yet, hence the success factor for curing these conditions is not accurate. No tried and tested vaccines or treatment procedures are available for some conditions. In this scenario reading a record of doctor who has treated this condition and has failed to cure it, does not accurately determine his competency. The doctor might be skilled but since there is no formal treatment procedure he has to rely on his instincts and experience to treat it, which might not always prove efficacious.

Having access to records would help the patient understand the procedures involved, the cost of treatment and various other factors. They would be more aware of what to expect during treatment and will make them mentally ready for the same. However, it might possibly cause hindrance with patients making constant inquiries in case of a different procedure undertaken by a doctor who has previously used a different treatment procedure. Thus, along with having access to the records the patients should be made aware of the overall medical procedure and need to be informed of all the various factors involved that have been discussed above.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
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...t has in the doctor depends, indeed, on the the doctors past experiences and success re...
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Line 1, column 664, Rule ID: PAST_EXPERIENCE_MEMORY[1]
Message: Use simply 'experiences'.
Suggestion: experiences
...tor depends, indeed, on the the doctors past experiences and success record. There have been deb...
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...d permission from the patient to do so. Since confidentiality is a major concern the ...
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...icy must take this under consideration. If such a policy were to be implemented it...
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Suggestion: Similarly,
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... tested vaccines or treatment procedures are available for some conditions. In th...
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Suggestion: might; possibly
...entally ready for the same. However, it might possibly cause hindrance with patients making co...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, similarly, so, thus, well, as to, for example, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 12.9106741573 124% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2822.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 537.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25512104283 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81386128306 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83006589162 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463687150838 0.4932671777 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 873.9 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 9.0 4.99550561798 180% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6374506414 60.3974514979 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.785714286 118.986275619 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1785714286 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355370157277 0.243740707755 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0986500405682 0.0831039109588 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0929148970782 0.0758088955206 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.201782135607 0.150359130593 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556166990896 0.0667264976115 83% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 131.0 100.480337079 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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