Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agr

Modern innovations offer improved and alternative methods of instructing for students. Yet, it can be argued that these progressions in technology are traditionally instruments geared towards entertainment and distract from learning. This blanket statement may hold merit in some select situations. Indeed the use of any technology in education is strongly associated with individual study habits and ability to focus. Nevertheless, when utilized properly, these advances offer unmatched and efficient learning potentials that should not be overlooked.

The biggest benefit that technology offers students is related to efficiency. In today's world, the ease of access to information is incredible when compared to just half a century ago. Computers and the internet save exponential amounts of effort leaving more time to focus elsewhere. Where it would take hours or even days to research and write a paper on advanced calculus in the mid 20th century. Today the internet allows us to make progress in mere minutes. Students routinely have the ability to take advantage of these opportunities. Today, students have the ability to connect with instructors at a distance, read text-books online, and procure simplified explanations to difficult materials. Moreover, as technology continues to advance, this proficiency is even becoming essentially required today. There is no doubt that, in the right hands, innovations offer tangible learning opportunities. These methodologies have become fundamental in today’s education system and without them students will be at a disadvantage and will likely fall behind.

Yet perhaps the statement should more clearly imply that despite these modern methods, students are choosing not to utilize them properly. This suggests that the issue should be more centered around self control and improper time and resource management. Educational information is clearly readily accessible, but likewise, so is entertainment. Movies can now be streamed at the click of a button. Hours of video blogs can be viewed with little to no effort on the viewers part. It can be assumed that students would rather engage in enjoyable activities than those didactic in nature. This may be true, but vary greatly depending on the individual’s behavior and level of discipline. Any innovation or methodology has the potential for misuse, but we cannot ignore the clear advantages when used properly.

Conclusively, modern innovations do indeed offer distracting elements. However, under the right circumstances, technology allows for efficient and advanced learning opportunities unlike anything this world has seen before. We should therefore stress the importance of proper use rather than focus on distraction potential.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 300, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Indeed,
...y hold merit in some select situations. Indeed the use of any technology in education ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, likewise, look, may, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, no doubt

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2351.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 411.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.7201946472 5.05705443957 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12191714252 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.598540145985 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 747.0 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.77640449438 281% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.4165151054 60.3974514979 49% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.4230769231 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8076923077 23.4991977007 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.30769230769 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.126573641589 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.037747015169 0.0831039109588 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0549252374612 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0902239669094 0.150359130593 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0571537072035 0.0667264976115 86% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.6 12.1639044944 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.07 8.38706741573 120% => OK
difficult_words: 148.0 100.480337079 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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