Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Almost in every part of our life, there is influence of science and technoloy in this age. Education is not any exception. The prompt states that although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning. I mostly disagree with the statement and argue that those ennovations enhance the instructing methods and overall the education system, students can use it for the real learnig or they can use it for any other purposes; it is fully depends on their will.
Firstly, ennovations such as video, computers, and internets improved the method of instruction. For example, the atomic model is so much complicated for a school students, when he learn it from the book, which is two dimentional, on the other hand, when he search it in youtube, he will get the three dimentional video of the atomic model. This three dimentionla video will elucidate him the process of bonding proton and neutro in nucleus and the process of revolving electrons around nucleus. There are a lot of vedio in the internet, which are able to provide a lucid perception of a complex topic to the students and teache can easily instruct those topic with the help of a computer and a projector. This example shows us that videos, computers and the internet make the instruction method easier and more sophisticated.
Secondly, the internet is the ocean of information. Students can use it for different purposes. They can use it for the real learning, or they can use it for other puposes. For example a Ph.D student need a lot of information and data for his or her research. In the internet there are lot of information and research paper and everything about the information, the student is looking for. Thus, he can get easily and with less effert the information and data that he wants. Therefor, students can use the ennovations for the real study.
However, the ennovations can sometimes distract some students. For example, when a school students get the easy excess of these technology, he will use it for different purposes such as for movie, social sites and for entertainment purposes in most of the cases.
In conclusion, it is without any doubt that innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet enhance the education system; howeverer, sometimes students are ditracted by this technology from the real learning. Therefore, like every thing technologies has pros and cons, in reality those technologies enhance the education system, students may use it for the real learning or may not, it is fully depends on the students will.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 182, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'learns'.
Suggestion: learns
...plicated for a school students, when he learn it from the book, which is two dimentio...
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Line 3, column 259, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'searches'.
Suggestion: searches
...dimentional, on the other hand, when he search it in youtube, he will get the three di...
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Line 3, column 650, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this topic' or 'those topics'?
Suggestion: this topic; those topics
...students and teache can easily instruct those topic with the help of a computer and a proje...
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Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: D
... it for other puposes. For example a Ph.D student need a lot of information and d...
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Line 7, column 123, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this technology' or 'these technologies'?
Suggestion: this technology; these technologies
... school students get the easy excess of these technology, he will use it for different purposes ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, as for, for example, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 33.0505617978 127% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 58.6224719101 68% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2225.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 443.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02257336343 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58776254615 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81559617072 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.44920993228 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 689.4 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 72.0051387055 60.3974514979 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.25 118.986275619 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.15 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.05 5.21951772744 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321138762179 0.243740707755 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101266874272 0.0831039109588 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106452453134 0.0758088955206 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19063574973 0.150359130593 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.070999285309 0.0667264976115 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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