As technology is evolving, more inventions are taking place which are making our lives easier. From generation to generation we encounter a lot of changes in the living style. Things are much more easier than they used to be earlier. The comforts we are having helps us to complete most of the work faster. In my opinion, I mostly disagree with the statement because the luxuries and conveniences of life might not prevent an individual from becoming truly strong and independent for the following reasons.
Firstly, the comforts that we are having make us become more independent. The reason is as we have all the needs we can work ourselves without depending on anyone. For suppose, let's consider a small-scale businessman who earns some amount on a daily basis. His business is growing and income is increased. Now as he is engaged with his work, he's not having time to count the money he earned daily. So, he can buy a machine which counts money, so most of his time is saved. In order to maintain records, he saves the information in the computer. Now for suppose, let's consider we are living in earlier 19th century and if the same problem is encountered by the person what will he do? He should ask someone to help him in maintaining records, counting money and etc. So from this we can say that as with the help of technology we can be truly independent.
Secondly, nothing can prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individual. The reason is if the person is truly determined and have his own goals, luxury only helps to make things available, and to achieve the goals in a more convenient way. Luxury means having more than what is needed. If life provides us more than what we need, we have to utilise the opportunity, make ourselves grow and help others to grow with us. So if we utitlise the comforts in an efficient way, we develop into a strong individual.
Further, to conclude, If we misuse the comforts and live a luxurious life without caring about the people around us and also not making time for ourselves, it prevents us from growing into a determined person. Whatever life provides us, we have to utilise them effectively and most importantly we have to make time for ourselves. It might be through meditation, or spending time by reading books or anything which we like to do, we should have the Me-time. So if people utilise everything in an effective way, the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life don't prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 193, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...es in the living style. Things are much more easier than they used to be earlier. The comfo...
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Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: he's
...ed. Now as he is engaged with his work, hes not having time to count the money he e...
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Line 3, column 759, Rule ID: AND_ETC[1]
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
... in maintaining records, counting money and etc. So from this we can say that as with th...
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Line 5, column 477, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an efficient way" with adverb for "efficient"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...with us. So if we utitlise the comforts in an efficient way, we develop into a strong individual. ...
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Line 7, column 490, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...e-time. So if people utilise everything in an effective way, the luxuries and conveniences of conte...
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Line 7, column 562, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...s and conveniences of contemporary life dont prevent people from developing into tru...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 50.0 33.0505617978 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 58.6224719101 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2113.0 2235.4752809 95% => OK
No of words: 441.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79138321995 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70487991944 2.79657885939 97% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 215.323595506 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467120181406 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 680.4 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.8800871459 60.3974514979 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0416666667 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.375 23.4991977007 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.54166666667 5.21951772744 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 10.2758426966 175% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204480317176 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0694184181906 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126097173889 0.0758088955206 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15827773391 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0896677200222 0.0667264976115 134% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 14.1392134831 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.8420337079 126% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.1743820225 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 12.1639044944 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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