Although many people think that the luxuries and conveniences of contemporary life are entirely harmless, they in fact, prevent people from developing into truly strong and independent individuals.
With the advancement of science and technology; people nowadays have been able to enjoy luxury and convenience like never before. It is, indeed, a considerable issue that whether such conveniences are entirely harmless? In my point of view, such conveniences are having harmful impact on our life rather than doing well; because people are increasingly being dependent over them. However, not discussing their benign impact on our life would be unfair.
In the first place, people nowadays are losing their own ability and skills because of the dependency on modern convenient technology. As an example, with the advent of calculator, people do not bother to do even simple mathematical calculation; situation is such a worse that if we do not allow our student to use calculator in a mathematics exam, hardly any student would get the answer correct. Even though it looks a simple issue outwardly, but in fact, it is undermining our student’s mental ability.
In the second place, if we make a close look at our other areas of our everyday life, it will not be difficult to recon that modern facilities are having detrimental effect in our life. For example, until few years back, my country was self dependence in clothing; hand-weaved clothes were ubiquitous. But today’s scenario is totally different; machine-made Chinese clothes have taken control over the market. It is hard to find old domestic genuine clothes. Old manufacturing industries are out of business; people are not only losing their job, but also losing dexterity of their hand.
Furthermore, because of the access to the information and technology, people’s dependence for the information over technology is in rise. For example, our students are resorting to internet to do their home task. They do not want to make effort on their own for even for the simple problem and which in turn making them more dependent toward internet. And they, on the other hand, are losing their own ability to solve the problems.
Admittedly, the availability of modern conveniences has made people’s life easier than before. Without any physical effort people can travel thousands of miles of distance; they can reach their work place faster than before, which has saved more times for them and they are able to utilize such time to develop their personality; to develop various skills which would enable them for the job in the market. As a result they might be developing themselves into independent individual. However, such conveniences are rendering them to use less physical effort and are actually making them lazy and consequently making them vulnerable to different kinds of disease.
In conclusion, even though modern luxury and conveniences appear to have benign effect in our life, they are actually making us more dependent and hence preventing us from being more strong and independent individual.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 412, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... enable them for the job in the market. As a result they might be developing thems...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ore strong and independent individual.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, second, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, as a result, in the first place, in the second place, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 33.0505617978 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2429.0 2235.4752809 109% => OK
No of words: 466.0 442.535393258 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21244635193 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87414690017 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 215.323595506 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.50643776824 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 776.7 704.065955056 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.10617977528 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.38483146067 251% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.8089552213 60.3974514979 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.666666667 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1904761905 23.4991977007 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.85714285714 5.21951772744 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204354634604 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641679565591 0.0831039109588 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055467014661 0.0758088955206 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114071223629 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057707933048 0.0667264976115 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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