Morality is one of the main characteristics of a true leader on whom the citizen's can rely. In fact, the value of a leader is increased due to fair or transparent ruling and peoples also venerate him for long term . The prompt recommends that the leader should judge everyone on basis of law because in this way citizen can have faith on leaders. In my opinion, i strongly disagrees with this suggestion and argue that an effective leader should posses moral judgement rather than gaining respect of his peers for two reasons.
To begin , character of a person is always valued more than anything. Thus , the moral judgement is always appreciated to the eyes of citizens because they play a role model in front of them. For instance, a nation falls different critical situation where they are biased by various external threats and this is the time where the effective leader arises with his experience and intuition . Judgement is the leaders main weapon at the time of need. We can see various story regarding the moral judgement of a true leader. Mahatta Gandi was a true effective leader who used his intuition and faith on its citizens and gained victory.From the above example we can see that person are influenced by their judgement not by the respect of their peers.
Further, an important position like leaders are always affected by negative comments. Leaders are criticized for their moves . If the move was not satisfactory to the citizen then they are hated . So if the decision is only supported by the close peers and abhors by the general people then it does not have good effect on his leadership. An effective leader is he who can make both parties placate. For Instance, the recent incident regarding police arrest of an american black citizen and the tragic death plays a vital example where the judgement can be seen as the quality of an effective leader. It is known to all that racism plays hindrance to the economical growth and a nation losing a lot due to this . From the above example we can interpret that to gain respect from citizen we need to be morally strong .
Of course, some argue that if we can get respect from our peers and they help us giving different ideas then we can get better judgmental thoughts. But at the end of the day its you who is choosing which to accept or reject. The respect is earned through your decision not by flattery otherwise someday it will backfire. So an effective leader must value his own decision rather than how to gain respect from his peers.
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...ctory to the citizen then they are hated . So if the decision is only supported by...
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...e leader. It is known to all that racism plays hindrance to the economical growth...
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...rom citizen we need to be morally strong . Of course, some argue that if we can...
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...respect from our peers and they help us giving different ideas then we can get better ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, regarding, so, then, thus, for instance, in fact, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 441.0 442.535393258 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7052154195 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50621817843 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492063492063 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.6620812497 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.3181818182 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0454545455 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04545454545 5.21951772744 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 5.13820224719 175% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317542308015 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0953552086974 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.078132621845 0.0758088955206 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.209015473112 0.150359130593 139% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0505983157062 0.0667264976115 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 14.1392134831 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.74 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 100.480337079 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.