In any field—business, politics, education, government—those in power should be required to step down after five years.
Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.
Would 5 years be long enough for those in power to establish anything meaningful? Or is it too long if the people in power bring hell down on those whom they govern?
Let’s look at it in business. In business like a pharmaceutical companies, it takes about 5 years to achieve a goal they created, if not 10 years. If the business strategies introduced and led by the management was successful, there is absolutely no need to change the leadership. The leaders know the people, the products, and the history of the company. The companies led by such excellent leaders provide stability, and should continue to grow building up the culture and its revenue. Therefore changing the leadership without any reasons after 5 years can give a devastating impact to such a company. Same goes for the politics and government. With a strong clairvoyant leadership, there is no war or poverty. Hence the economy and culture flourish. Again, this type of leadership should provide a stability and good auspicious future to a country they govern. In contrast, in Middle Eastern countries, the leadership continues to rise and fall. The turnover of the political leadership creates war, destroys the economy and the culture they had built up in the previous era. For these reasons, I cannot stress enough that leadership should not step down after 5 years of service without a good reason.
How about in schools? The experience you had with your teachers in schools become irreplaceable memories. Whether you liked these teachers or not, it is inevitable that it becomes a part of your personal history. If teachers no longer work at the same school after 5 years, you would feel you are missing a part of your history when you revisit there. There won’t be anyone to remember you or share the experience you had learning there and growing up there. Again, I must disagree to the policy that the people in power should step down after 5 years.
However, when things are not so going well in case of business or politics/government, it is not such a bad idea for those who have the power to step down. Especially in politics, if the same people govern too long, it is prone to corruption. If the leadership is weak and brings the country and its people down to misery, it is perhaps time for them to step down. This is exactly why we have 8 years of limited leadership for the presidents in the United States. It is always very important to reinforce the policy with an option that the government officials are required to step down when they were called for. Perhaps not every 5 years, but as necessary.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'he'll'?
Suggestion: he'll
...t too long if the people in power bring hell down on those whom they govern? Let...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...uilding up the culture and its revenue. Therefore changing the leadership without any rea...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...leadership, there is no war or poverty. Hence the economy and culture flourish. Again...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, look, so, therefore, well, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2155.0 2235.4752809 96% => OK
No of words: 452.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.76769911504 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.61088837703 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74938231268 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.491150442478 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 661.5 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.2370786517 133% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.0887110012 60.3974514979 60% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.8148148148 118.986275619 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7407407407 23.4991977007 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.21951772744 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297959299442 0.243740707755 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0699412546583 0.0831039109588 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623968546391 0.0758088955206 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175182984509 0.150359130593 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063690354478 0.0667264976115 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.4 14.1392134831 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 12.1639044944 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.68 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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