In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Whatever people set out to do, someone long before them has likely done it as well. History has recorded several instances where major discoveries and records set have been somewhat credited to those that came before them. The prompt has said that it is impossible to make a major contribution without being influenced by our elders’ achievements. I mostly agree with this extreme statement, for two reasons and disagree with it for one reason.
Firstly, looking at past achievements can boost motivation to make people more likely to contribute more. For example, a police officer who respects his father and his record number of criminals caught could be more motivated to do his job better by working harder and taking on more responsibilities such as night patrol. Thus, the young officer will be contributing more to his endeavor since he was inspired by the past achievements of his father by taking on more responsibilities. Which in turn will cause him to contribute more to the police force by making it more likely that he will keep the city safer with his extra duties.
In addition, looking at past achievements can make significant contributions by creating new ways of thinking. For instance, the development of the scientific method which is a method that is hundreds of years old has allowed scientists to create almost everything we take for granted everyday such as automobiles and vaccinations to name a few. If scientists today do not look back at the scientific method, it will be more impractical for them to make many contributions to their particular endeavor since there is no strategy that will help them make many contributions.
On the other hand, significant contributions can be made without looking at past achievements. To illustrate, a young teacher can be determined due to her own altruism to help kids learn. Since his teacher is naturally caring and passionate about education, she does not need to look at historical instances of achievement in order to thrive and make significant contributions in her career. As for the prompt, one instance of significant contribution without looking at past achievements discounts the “impossible” clause which it contains.
In conclusion, looking at past achievements can help people make significant contributions, however since there is at least one other way a significant contribution can be made without looking at past instances of success, it is not the only way to make significant contributions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 487, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...her by taking on more responsibilities. Which in turn will cause him to contribute mo...
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Line 5, column 286, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...e almost everything we take for granted everyday such as automobiles and vaccinations to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, look, so, thus, well, as for, at least, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 33.0505617978 106% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 58.6224719101 123% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2104.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 404.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.20792079208 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48327461151 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.25582283232 2.79657885939 116% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 215.323595506 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.49504950495 0.4932671777 100% => OK
syllable_count: 662.4 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6477834193 60.3974514979 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.5 118.986275619 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.25 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.6875 5.21951772744 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227744182782 0.243740707755 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0892930676739 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.057286562377 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13671358615 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253472231557 0.0667264976115 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 100.480337079 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.