Fossil evidence indicates that the blompus—an extremely large, carnivorous land mammal—inhabited the continent of Pentagoria for tens of thousands of years until its sudden decline and ultimate extinction about twelve thousand years ago. Scientists have determined that the extinction coincided with a period of significant climate change and with the arrival of the first humans. Some scholars theorize that the climate change so altered the distribution of plants and animals in the environment that the food chain upon which the blompus depended was irretrievably disrupted. Others contend that predation by humans is the more plausible explanation for the rapid population decline.
Scholars debate whether or not human settlement and/or climate change is responsible for the disappearance of the blompus in the continent of Pentagoria. Theories about predation and disruption of the animals’ food sources are both logical and plausible explanations that could explain the decline and extinction, however neither theory can be accepted without additional evidence. There are many different assumptions that both of these theories rely on before they can be accepted.
Firstly, if the blompus really had its food supply disrupted by the climate, it is important to figure out the diet of these animals. The scholar stated that both plants and animals were disrupted. Are the blompus herbivores or carnivores? If they are herbivores, are the plants that they really rely on for food really affected by the climate changing? It is important to specify which palnts constitute their diets before any conclusions can be dran. Also, if they are carnivores, it is possible that those animals which they feed off of rely on plants which were disrupted by climate change or those animals themselves probably migrated due to that changing whather conditions.
The same contentions apply if the blompus were omnivores. Again, since the specific diet has not been elucidated, it is very difficult to determine the starting point for the focus of which food source has been disrupted and how it leads to extinction.
Next, scholars have also mentioned that predation by human settlement is also another possible contention for the extinction of the blompus. However, this postulate is also vulnerable to criticisms. First, do humans have a reason to hunt this animal? Do they use the animal’s hide for making clothes or do they use this animal for food? Just because humans decide to share the same region as the blompus, it does not mean that they are responsible for their extinction or maybe even their decline. Also, even if humans have the desire to hunt animals and even if there is evidence that humans have been hunting other types of animals, there has to be evidence of their abilities to hunt the blompus. Is the blompus able to evade humans and easily avoid predation? If so, humans cannot have caused their extinction.
Lastly, it is possible that both factors, not just one of the two factors alone, have caused the extinction. Since there was a gradual decline before the time of extinction, there may have been a lot of time for both the climate and predation to take effect. Since the scholars have not specified whether or not the climate quickly killed off the blompus food source before any significant predation can occur, it is possible that humans may have developed better technologies to hunt and kill the blompus. Since there are two competing factors at play here, there is a vast quantity of evidence that is required to rule out the possibility that two factors contribute to the extinction and decline.
The scholars have both logical ideas about how the extinction of the blompus took place, however there is still a lot of evidence that must be looked for in order to confirm one, both, or none of the proposed explanations.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 529 350
No. of Characters: 2578 1500
No. of Different Words: 213 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.796 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.873 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.532 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 185 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 142 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 88 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 60 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.042 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.933 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.312 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.504 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.09 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 17, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
Scholars debate whether or not human settlement and/or climate change ...
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Line 1, column 398, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
... without additional evidence. There are many different assumptions that both of these theories...
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Line 6, column 821, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ns cannot have caused their extinction. Lastly, it is possible that both factors...
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Line 8, column 298, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
.... Since the scholars have not specified whether or not the climate quickly killed off the blom...
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Line 8, column 508, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...hnologies to hunt and kill the blompus. Since there are two competing factors at play...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, lastly, look, may, really, so, still, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 35.0 19.6327345309 178% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 11.1786427146 170% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 28.8173652695 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 55.5748502994 106% => OK
Nominalization: 24.0 16.3942115768 146% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2656.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 528.0 441.139720559 120% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0303030303 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.56307096286 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66713741971 2.78398813304 96% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 204.123752495 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.426136363636 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 851.4 705.55239521 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 2.70958083832 332% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 19.7664670659 121% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.9557007164 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.666666667 119.503703932 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 23.324526521 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45833333333 5.70786347227 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 6.88822355289 102% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0984747529306 0.218282227539 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0347137438571 0.0743258471296 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344300798174 0.0701772020484 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0581191930071 0.128457276422 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196959456705 0.0628817314937 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.3799401198 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 98.500998004 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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