Fossil evidence indicates that the blompus—an extremely large, carnivorous land mammal—
inhabited the continent of Pentagoria for tens of thousands of years until its sudden decline and
ultimate extinction about twelve thousand years ago. Scientists have determined that the
extinction coincided with a period of significant climate change and with the arrival of the first
humans. Some scholars theorize that the climate change so altered the distribution of plants and
animals in the environment that the food chain upon which the blompus depended was
irretrievably disrupted. Others contend that predation by humans is the more plausible
explanation for the rapid population decline.
Write a response in which you discuss specific evidence that could be used to decide
between the proposed explanations above.
This argument addresses the extinction of a large carnivoros mammal is due to either predation by human or ultimate climate changes that affected exsitance of some agricultural food sources of smaller animals being prediated by this large mammal. Whereas, it is noted that the extinction of this lare mammal occured by the time of climate changes and first existance of human on this piece of land, Pentagoria,where that large mammal was existing. it could be investigated through a set of evidences that the validation of the explination, which state the extinction of this large mammal is due to climate changes, is the most persuasive explination.
For instance, the climates could lead to migration of some animals searching for a suitable adaptive environment and could lead to disappearing of some plants that were main feeding source of a vast wide range of animals being prediated by this large mammal as well, which could lead to a further extiction of wide vast range of herbal animals. Then, the author need to provide more evidences regarding the degree of change of the climate by the time of that large mammal extinction in order to bolster this intended recommendation explinations validation.
Furthermore, the author need to provide clear evidences about the extend of climate changes up on the animals extinction that are below this large mammal in the food prediation chain, as well as evidences regarding the extinction of herbs and plants considered as the main source of food of such herbal animals in the food chain of this large carnivorous mammal, by the time of this larhe animal extinction. Perpahs this noted climate change was not significant enough to lead to extinction of such agressive big kind of animals that is adopted for living amoung tens of thousand of years in that piece of land, where this climate change could be experienced amoung this eras. Consequently, it could be taken for guaranteed that climate change is the main reason leading to such era animals extinction.
Conversely, the explination that is intended to refer this large mammal extinction to the presence of human as human was continously feeding on it, is not validated as first existance of human eras did not have such tools enough to defeat and prediate such big mammasl. Then, it is not accepted explination.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: This argument addresses the extinction of a large carnivoros mammal is due to either predation by human or ultimate climate changes that affected exsitance of some agricultural food sources of smaller animals being prediated by this large mammal.
Error: prediated Suggestion: predicted
Error: carnivoros Suggestion: carnivorous
Error: exsitance Suggestion: existence
Error: predation Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: Whereas, it is noted that the extinction of this lare mammal occured by the time of climate changes and first existance of human on this piece of land, Pentagoria,where that large mammal was existing. it could be investigated through a set of evidences that the validation of the explination, which state the extinction of this large mammal is due to climate changes, is the most persuasive explination.
Error: existance Suggestion: existence
Error: occured Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: lare Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: explination Suggestion: explanation
Sentence: For instance, the climates could lead to migration of some animals searching for a suitable adaptive environment and could lead to disappearing of some plants that were main feeding source of a vast wide range of animals being prediated by this large mammal as well, which could lead to a further extiction of wide vast range of herbal animals.
Error: prediated Suggestion: predicted
Error: herbal Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: extiction Suggestion: extinction
Sentence: Then, the author need to provide more evidences regarding the degree of change of the climate by the time of that large mammal extinction in order to bolster this intended recommendation explinations validation.
Error: explinations Suggestion: explanations
Sentence: Furthermore, the author need to provide clear evidences about the extend of climate changes up on the animals extinction that are below this large mammal in the food prediation chain, as well as evidences regarding the extinction of herbs and plants considered as the main source of food of such herbal animals in the food chain of this large carnivorous mammal, by the time of this larhe animal extinction.
Error: larhe Suggestion: large
Error: herbal Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: prediation Suggestion: prediction
Sentence: Perpahs this noted climate change was not significant enough to lead to extinction of such agressive big kind of animals that is adopted for living amoung tens of thousand of years in that piece of land, where this climate change could be experienced amoung this eras.
Error: amoung Suggestion: among
Error: agressive Suggestion: aggressive
Sentence: Conversely, the explination that is intended to refer this large mammal extinction to the presence of human as human was continously feeding on it, is not validated as first existance of human eras did not have such tools enough to defeat and prediate such big mammasl.
Error: continously Suggestion: continuously
Error: mammasl Suggestion: mammal
Error: existance Suggestion: existence
Error: prediate Suggestion: predate
Error: explination Suggestion: explanation
Sentence: Then, it is not accepted explination.
Error: explination Suggestion: explanation
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 18 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 385 350
No. of Characters: 1909 1500
No. of Different Words: 147 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.43 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.958 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.714 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 135 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 102 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 42.778 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.993 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.889 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.46 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.699 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.154 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
This argument addresses the extinction o...
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Line 1, column 413, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , where
... human on this piece of land, Pentagoria,where that large mammal was existing. it coul...
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Line 1, column 452, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...a,where that large mammal was existing. it could be investigated through a set of ...
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Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s, is the most persuasive explination. For instance, the climates could lead to...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ecommendation explinations validation. Furthermore, the author need to provide ...
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Line 3, column 66, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...r need to provide clear evidences about the extend of climate changes up on the animals ex...
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Line 3, column 106, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'animals'' or 'animal's'?
Suggestion: animals'; animal's
...the extend of climate changes up on the animals extinction that are below this large ma...
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Line 3, column 669, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...mate change could be experienced amoung this eras. Consequently, it could be taken f...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...eading to such era animals extinction. Conversely, the explination that is inte...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, first, furthermore, if, regarding, so, then, well, whereas, for instance, kind of, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.9520958084 62% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 11.1786427146 45% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 28.8173652695 104% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 55.5748502994 117% => OK
Nominalization: 28.0 16.3942115768 171% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1941.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 384.0 441.139720559 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0546875 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.56307096286 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82861773447 2.78398813304 102% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.408854166667 0.468620217663 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 616.5 705.55239521 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 19.7664670659 51% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.8473053892 166% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 98.9226465477 57.8364921388 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 194.1 119.503703932 162% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.4 23.324526521 165% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.9 5.70786347227 208% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.25449101796 171% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.124148832145 0.218282227539 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582771644783 0.0743258471296 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0332260251905 0.0701772020484 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0809207884325 0.128457276422 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0265738811932 0.0628817314937 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.6 14.3799401198 150% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 48.3550499002 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 12.197005988 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 12.3882235529 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 11.1389221557 154% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.9071856287 160% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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