In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Some might insist that one can succeed in a certain area without the help of previous research. However, it seems impossible to make an important contribution without past achievements.
Firstly, making a significant contribution is harder than anytime due to a glut of previous successes and their complexity, but previous achievements suggest us the ways to achieve further steps. These days, despite the difficulties to make a significant contribution to any field, the speed of development in many fields such as medicine, engineering, business, and education is accelerating. How could it be possible? The enhanced accessibility to previous achievements through the internet and other digital sources seems the answer to the question. For the sake of past achievements, people can easily acquire the related information in their fields, analyze what problems were and how previous research tried to solve them, and suggest new solutions. Since the problems are getting more and more complicated, without studying previous cases, it is almost impossible to make a significant contribution to any certain area. Thus, past achievements take an important role for someone to make a contribution to one’s field.
Secondly, in every field, basic theorems have to be acquired. There is nowhere a neophyte without any basic knowledge in a certain field can make a success in the field. Some might insist that if you want to invent something new, all you need is imagination. However, it is not true; in order to invent something, they have to understand situations where new inventions are required, understand basic science concepts for making the basis of how a new machine works, and consider methods to make the machine in the real world. Or some might say artistic fields are where basic knowledge is unnecessary. However, in order to make a contribution in the artistic fields by composing new styled music or painting new styled pictures, they all need to firstly learn how to read scores, how to use brushes for each situation to express different textures, and other things that previous achievements have been developed. Therefore, it shows the importance of learning previous achievement, and it seems impossible to make a significant contribution to a certain field without them.
To sum up, without being influenced by previous achievements, it is impossible to make a significant contribution to any certain fields.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2052.0 2235.4752809 92% => OK
No of words: 385.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32987012987 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4296068528 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09463270197 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 215.323595506 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.488311688312 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.0066594109 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.705882353 118.986275619 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6470588235 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35294117647 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284259787671 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109278092589 0.0831039109588 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0674487646004 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1936093927 0.150359130593 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0431628073012 0.0667264976115 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 14.1392134831 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.93 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 100.480337079 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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