In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Is it possible to make significant contributions without being strongly influenced by past achievements at first? The speaker says no, but I disagree.
In the history, there were a lot of scientific developments that shocked the entire scientific society in the past but were proven correct. For example, when Darwin proposed the theory of evolution, many people laughed at his idea that humans evolved from other animals. If Darwin was strongly influenced by the past researches, who were more or less influenced by the Genesis, he would comply with the mainstream scientists at the time and his scientific discoveries might be delayed. Therefore, it is very important that one should not let the past achievements dominate one’s mindset and it is okay to challenge the mainstream.
Instead of completely overturning past establishments like Darwin did, some innovators choose to take a different approach and build upon others’ achievements. Steve Jobs and the Apple Inc., for example, revolutionized mobile phone with the introduction of iPhone. At the time, cell phones were equipped with physical keyboards and touchpen, but engineers from Apple did not let themselves strongly influenced by those, so they came out with iPhone, a combination of a cell phone, an iPod, and an Internet device. Such an innovation could not happen if designers did not think out of the box.
Even though it is important not to be heavily influenced by others, it would be a bad idea not learning about past achievements or blocking others’ criticism. To innovate or challenge established views, we need to objectively examine existing ideas at first. Little can be achieved if we are either completely ignorant or completely reliant on past achievements.
In sum, I think it is possible to make significant contributions without getting overly influenced by others.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, for example, i think, more or less
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1576.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 296.0 442.535393258 67% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32432432432 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09612112709 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584459459459 0.4932671777 118% => OK
syllable_count: 487.8 704.065955056 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9515080019 60.3974514979 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.571428571 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1428571429 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64285714286 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.246213458989 0.243740707755 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0951573921732 0.0831039109588 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.136150681115 0.0758088955206 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.189944385753 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130747376166 0.0667264976115 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.1639044944 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.05 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.