In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The topic raises the controversial issue where the author asserts that it is impossible to make a significant contribution without being strongly influenced by past achievements. Indisputably, the most important thing is contributing rather than being influenced by past achievements. Being strongly influenced by past achievements might make a person over confident and take things lightly. Nevertheless, it is not necessary for a person to have past achievements to contribute significantly in the field of endeavor.
First of all, let us consider a fresher who just enters the field of endeavor does not have any experience in the particular field, has no past achievements in the field. It doesn’t mean that the fresher cannot excel in the particular field. Everybody starts from scratch, be it the person who achieves fabulously in his field of endeavor or anyone who wants to make contributions later on. It depends on person to person on the way they achieve, some are quick enough to contribute and a few might be late bloomers who end up achieving but a bit late.
Considering a sportsman, generally careers in sports start at a relatively younger age. The debutants who play the sport at a certain level do not have past achievements to bank on , still a few end up making humongous contributions . Even though they do not have experience they end up excelling in the particular sport. Although ,a sportsman who has not had any significant achievements in the past can end up getting brilliant results. It happens due to the kind of attitude of the person , frame of mind ,etc.
Attitude is the key to achieve anything in any particular field. Everything depends upon the way a person thinks. Having the determination to make contributions are irrelevant of the fact where achievements count. Achievements are important but one should not have the achievements over his head and be over confident that he could make contributions without any grit, it is very relative and depends on person to person.
Concluding , although past achievements matter a lot to make significant contributions in the field of endeavor, but it is not a necessity. A person has his own way of doing things and it will be done accordingly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ew end up making humongous contributions . Even though they do not have experience...
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...end up making humongous contributions . Even though they do not have experience they end up...
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...d up excelling in the particular sport. Although ,a sportsman who has not had any signif...
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...ings and it will be done accordingly.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, if, nevertheless, so, still, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 58.6224719101 106% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 2235.4752809 84% => OK
No of words: 369.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07317073171 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19209630635 2.79657885939 114% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 215.323595506 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.476964769648 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.6066203743 60.3974514979 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.5263157895 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.94736842105 5.21951772744 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300314903025 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11120208263 0.0831039109588 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842780384318 0.0758088955206 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.19636358942 0.150359130593 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0778106200245 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.4 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.