People who make decisions based on emotion and justify those decisions with logic afterwards are poor decision makers.
In life there are many situations where in one has to take decisions.Some of the decisions can be spontaneous and the rest can be thoughtful.Nevertheless, people who make decisions based on emotion and justify them later with logic are indeed poor decision makers. I agree with the author in regard to this.
Making an emotional decision early on and then justify the logic later shows the kind of person he is.In such a case the people who endup making decision on emotion will apply numerous logics to prove the former to be justified. This numerous logics no matter how baseless and logic less they are,a person will prove it till the time the logic goes with the decision made. There are numerous instances where emotions have taken toll on a person's decision and led to large scale consequences.
Mohammad Bin Tughlaq , the Sultan of Delhi during the Delhi Sultanate period in 1400s , was one the kind.He was considered one of the smartest ruler ever to rule Delhi.But emotions got better of him and he made an emotional decision of shifting the capital from Delhi to Aurangabad.He shifted the capital to Aurangabad inorder to attract people from central part of India and be a part of the Delhi Sultanate.He was a very emotional person who thought he could spread his love and wealth allover the country and shifting to Aurangabad was one step closer to that.Although he had justified the attraction of people by saying the amount of resources in Aurangabad was more than that in Delhi.This decision of shifting the capital lead to the decline of Tughlaq as Delhi was attacked by the Mongolians(Mughals) in Delhi. Being one of the smartest leaders during his time, one mistake of getting the emotion better of him lead to decline of his dynasty.This proves that people who make decisions based on emotions and later justify them are termed poor in their decision making.Mohammad Bin Tughlaq was one example of it.
Concluding that people who make decisions based on emotions and later justify them are termed poor in their decision making.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, nevertheless, so, then, as to, kind of, in regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1710.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 347.0 442.535393258 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92795389049 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82688245945 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466858789625 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 704.065955056 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 20.2370786517 40% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 43.0 23.0359550562 187% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 226.260773224 60.3974514979 375% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 213.75 118.986275619 180% => OK
Words per sentence: 43.375 23.4991977007 185% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.21951772744 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 22.0 7.80617977528 282% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 10.2758426966 39% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.475094491933 0.243740707755 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.275357546642 0.0831039109588 331% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167942016894 0.0758088955206 222% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.398756621831 0.150359130593 265% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.127203399076 0.0667264976115 191% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.5 14.1392134831 166% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.83 48.8420337079 57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 12.1743820225 165% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.2 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 100.480337079 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 19.2 11.2143820225 171% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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