A movie producer sent the following memo to the head of the movie studio.
“We need to increase the funding for the movie Working Title by 10% in order to ensure a quality product. As you know, we are working with a first-time director, whose only previous experience has been shooting commercials for a shampoo company. Since the advertising business is notoriously wasteful, it stands to reason that our director will expect to be able to shoot take after take, without concern for how much time is being spent on any one scene. In addition, while we have saved money by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors, this savings in salary will undoubtedly translate to greater expenditures in paying the actors and unionized crew overtime for the extra hours they will spend on the set waiting for the assistant directors and producers to arrange things. If we don’t get this extra money, the movie is virtually assured to be a failure.”
The movie producer in the given excerpt is basically criticizing the staff involved in the production of the movie Working Title as he wants to have the funding increased. The director of the movie happens to be directing the movie for the very first time. Whereas , the producer here has no grounds to increase the funding of the movie as there are no strong reasons on why they need extra funding . All his points are based on assumptions and no valid reason .
Firstly , he is criticizing the director of the movie just because he is a first timer and he only worked for advertising business.
There would have been a time where other directors would have also thought the same about the producer when it was his first time , so its quite undermining in the way he is talking about the director of the movie. In addition to the director the producer also criticized the advertising business and says that it is wasteful . On what basis is he saying this about the business, this shows how egoistic the producer as he differs between the movie and advertizing business in a very condescending manner.
Secondly , he believes that because the director was in the advertising business it will take a lot of time to shoot for the movies as there could be many takes . This is very demeaning to some working really hard for a particular profession.On top of it he has the audacity to say that money will be saved by hiring relatively inexperienced assistant producers and directors.
Was he never inexperienced? Was he always perfect in whatever he did? Did he always earn more from the time he started?
This unbelievable for a person in the same industry to feel this way .
Thirdly , he is asking extra funding on a reason solely assuming that the inexperienced assistant directors and producers will not be able to arrange things on time which will lead to actors and unionized crew to spend overtime on sets. How is he so certain that things of this sort are going to happen ? This is not right for the producer to be so critical with the staff instead of being a support to the inexperienced crew . He should definetly help out the emerging directors and producers instead of demeaning them .
Producer should make the movie a success without criticing the fact that the staff is poor . He should have more strong points to ask for increasing the funds than be presumptuous about his staff .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, whereas, in addition, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 19.5258426966 133% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 2235.4752809 89% => OK
No of words: 418.0 442.535393258 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75837320574 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68436586083 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.454545454545 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 619.2 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.7029940623 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.45 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9 23.4991977007 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35 5.21951772744 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.97078651685 161% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 7.80617977528 218% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243296541237 0.243740707755 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0887508298578 0.0831039109588 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873697649873 0.0758088955206 115% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12927688941 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.102515478374 0.0667264976115 154% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 100.480337079 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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