In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
although, it is a common misconception to see the success of many achievers in various fields being inspired by the past achievements within that field, it is possible to make significant contributions in any field without first being strongly influenced by the previous achievements within that field. we can clearly see this in the various achievements of many great people in the fields of science and sports.
Let us first take the example of one of the great scientists whose contribution to the field of science is immense. einstein, who is also regarded as the father of physics, did not have many past achievements to take inspiration from in the field of physics. During his time, physics was a relatively new field and did not have many breakthroughs as of yet. however, einstein still managed to make significant contributions to the field of physics by introducing many new theories which are still considered as the base for inventing any new theory. one such example is the theory of relativity introduced by einstein in 1856. this theory, till date, holds a significant value in physics and numerous ground-breaking technologies have been invented using this theory. hence, einstein has showed us that it is not always necessary to take inspirations from any previous achievements, rather, if one is focused on his/her work, then there is always scope for making important contributions to his/her desired field.
Additionally, when we look at the world of sports, we commonly hear many sportspersons saying they were inspired to take up the game by watching their favorite heroes play the sport. however, what people don't realize is the fact that this is not necessarily true always. one such scenario is the example of one of the greatest cricketers of all time, Don bradman. he hails from Melbourne, australia where cricket is the leading sport in the country at present. although, this wasn't always the case since cricket had not been introduced in australia until the early 1900's. At this time, when the sport was first introduced, there wasn't much scope or popularity for playing cricket. however, bradman took up the sport very seriously and created many records which haven't been broken till date. bradman wasn't inspired by any previous success stories in the sport, he was rather very fond the game itself and hence, made it possible to create many world records in cricket. therefore, this example shows us that people need not necessarily be influenced by past success in a field to make significant achievements.
Though it is very common to see the success stories of people taking inspirations from previous achievements in a particular field, it is not necessarily always the case as we have seen from the above examples. therefore, it is quite possible to achieve success in a field without being first strongly influenced by past instances of success within that field.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, look, so, still, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2465.0 2235.4752809 110% => OK
No of words: 479.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14613778706 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85476388222 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.438413361169 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 734.4 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.0065566404 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.25 118.986275619 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.95 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367745769616 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116295649632 0.0831039109588 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.172142513466 0.0758088955206 227% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.297967970898 0.150359130593 198% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.180874407661 0.0667264976115 271% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.55 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 100.480337079 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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