Scandals are useful because they focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Although, scandals might help focus our attention on problems in ways that no speaker or reformer ever could, its consequences are dire and leads to various negative effects. scandals spoil the reputation of the country or the organization in which it takes place and leads to loss of huge sums of money and resources which might never be recovered. When the authority in-charge are involved in scandals, it leads to unnecessary doubts on honest working professionals and people lose their faith in the government or the company.
Let us first take a look at the 2g scam in India which took place in October, 2015. In this scandal, the main culprit was then Finance minister, P chidambaram and his aides. According to the law, the rights to 2g technology was supposed to be given to the company offering the highest bid. however, chidambaram made sure that the rights were granted to Zee technologies and it was later revealed that, other companies who had placed higher bids were rejected the rights. after 4 years, this scam came into light due to a sting operation conducted by one of the major news channel. hence, a case was filed in the Supreme court to throw light on this scandal. after thorough investigation, it was revealed that chidambaram gave rights to a company in which his son-in-law had invested huge amounts of money, thereby, allowing his family members to make profit in an unscrupulous manner. later, chidambaram was convicted and jailed for 14 years. however, the money which was made by his family is now present in shell comapanies and the government is still not able to recover the money made by him. hence, this incident shows us that scandals need not necessarily be beneficial in any way and only does harm to the country or the government.
Another example of an Indian politician misusing his powers for personal gains is the current Home minister, D K Shivkumar. In the recent elections held in May, 2019, he declared assets worth 800 crores of rupees under his family name. however, in the previous elections held in 2014, he declared his assets as being worth 100 crores. this led to a few questions in the minds of the election Department and they launched a probe into how his assets were amassed. after the investigation was completed, the government officials proved that he made most of money through bribes and extortions. however, even after providing concrete evidence, the court has still not given a final verdict on his case and he is still leading a normal life without any hassles. therefore, even after realizing such scandals take place, the government is not able to do anything to bring corrupt politicians to justice and once again shows these scandals have no positive effects.
To summarize, we can conclude that, though scandals might help look at problems in a different perspective than any reformer or speaker ever could, they almost never have any positive consequences and therefore, are not very useful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Scandals
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, look, may, so, still, then, therefore
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 58.6224719101 114% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2488.0 2235.4752809 111% => OK
No of words: 502.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9561752988 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67577934117 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 215.323595506 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53984063745 0.4932671777 109% => OK
syllable_count: 764.1 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.5293440808 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.476190476 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9047619048 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.04761904762 5.21951772744 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 7.80617977528 205% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 5.13820224719 214% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14113705949 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041271295813 0.0831039109588 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0604166521938 0.0758088955206 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106884544627 0.150359130593 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691035497528 0.0667264976115 104% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.1392134831 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 48.8420337079 116% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 12.1743820225 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.43 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 100.480337079 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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